Reviews for UOPM: The Unforgettable Story

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Sweet Angel3 2001-07-18 ch 6,	abuseHey Sabrina, another great chapter! I can't wait until the next one comes out! It just keeps getting better and better! Keep it up! Oh, and BTW, I don't mind at all that I lost. I don't want to pressure you, but hurry with the next chapter!
Ghost of Maiden's Peak 2001-07-17 ch 1,	abuseWow!
Blue9Tiger 2001-07-17 ch 6,	abuseYeah, I'm too lazy to do my FA today. But I dont' feel I should give it anyways, since I know you worked very ** this, and amidst all the screams from the most frequent readers for you to finish it, you did not rush and did it the best that you could, and I'm very proud you were able to get this far despite all the setbacks. ^^ The song, was beautiful as always, really deep, and stuck under my head. Thanks for the entertainment, as it was truly enjoyable, and I'm lookin out for the next part, but don't rush, as you have plenty of time. ^_^
VEEMAN 2001-07-17 ch 6, anon.	abuseWow! ...Lol like, that was like....cool! All my friends make such good stories...I wish I could h well. Good luck to me..ppsh...and can't wait for chapter 7! Keep up the good work Sabbi.
SweetieCrystal 2001-07-17 ch 6,	abuseIts AWESOME SAB! So Romntic, it was Beautiful, and the Engaged part, Im speechless, it was beautiful, ::dies:: I Loved it, Luv ya Final, Luv ya Sab, Luv ya Blue, Luv Ya EveryBody, WHOOOOOO!!!!!!!
Blue9Tiger 2001-06-17 ch 5,	abuseYes, rather short. But I'm not rating length, so you're safe. It wouldn't be fair anyway, since some of the greatest fics written are this short. This chapter being about battles makes it a predictable plot, yet the outcome of the battles are unknown, therefore rendering it more interesting, and therefore a worthy plot. Very few spelling and grammatical errors, so few that you know what I'm gearing up for. ^^ Accurate character depictions, no deviations from the established personalities. It is therefore consistent, and full of continuity. Yes, and this time every single one of them were accurate. Point for you, hai? Onto the most important piece: description. Very good. It was spread out and, though not overwhelming, was sufficient enough to convey character moods, not to mention enviroment moods, such as state of the location, etc. Forgive me if this is so short, but I really have no additional comments to make on it, so on to the rating. ***2/3 Yes! No matter how short this was, it surpassed the quality of chapter 4, which was an excellent chapter, but this left me with nearly nothing to criticize on. 1. Visible plot with all of its components, and not to shabby of one, either. 2. Accurate character portrayal 3. Continuing of ample character development And two thirds: Minimum grammatical errors. Overall, well done. I'm looking foward to the sixth chapter. Now, hopefully, Fido will let me review in full. Somehow, my review for Chapter 5 was diced. Well...lets see.....
Blue9Tiger 2001-06-17 ch 4,	abuseLets get started, shall we? I have a lot to say on this and I will make it brief. It is visibly superb, but would have been perfect if not for a few flaws, mainly spelling, but punctuation and grammar was relatively fine. There are some unforgivable points of OOC: I did not CRY at the "Little Mermaid". >
Evan 2001-06-08 ch 5, anon.	abuseThis fic was obviosuly meant to potray the UoPM characters. I haven't read many fics and I've never read a love fic before. The only thing that would be considered really poor about it is that you abbreviated too much. I liked the way you protrayed me and Paul and nasty conspirators who only care about winning. I like characters like that. Espcially when I'm suppose to be the one. ;)
er.. 2001-06-07 ch 1, anon.	abuseto boring to keep me entertained. Too much dialogue. Not enough action. Sucky.
~Crystal~ 2001-06-04 ch 4, anon.	abuseCHPTER 4 RULED! It was the BEST EVER! ::huggles the computer:: I Looved this chapter, and sabrina, u got some good talent! I luv ya Final Foreva & alwayz!
Blue9TIger 2001-06-04 ch 3, anon.	abuseWhoa, this was great! Intersting plot. Again, all character's personalities were pretty much hit the nail. I'm glad you're doing this...encouraging UOPM members to explore the world of fanfiction. Merci beaucoup.
Paul9 2001-06-04 ch 3, anon.	abuse I feel so evil. Bwhahaha. -Paul9
~Crystal~ 2001-06-04 ch 3, anon.	abuseYa know, scratch out my second response, i dunno what i was thinking, but Its great, ur gonna be famous when u grow up, and I'm SOOOOOOO proud of u, (sorry 2 sound like a family member) BUT alls i have to say is gets all excited YAY!!! ^.^
13right Eyes 2001-06-01 ch 1, anon.	abuseHullo Sabrina. Overall I'd rate yer fiction a 7.4. IMO it could use more character development, and less diolouge. Also, I think you should include MUCH more description in yer next chapters. Yer writing skills have room for improvement, but I look forewards to your newest chapters. Remember, gotta practice. You've got it going, just gotta smooth out the rough edges and the fic will be ggggrrrreaat! Frum: 13rite! P.S. Good luck on yer story!
Blue9Tiger 2001-06-01 ch 2,	abuseJust as good as the first chapter, Sab. Your work is improving greatly. And the song was surprisingly deep. Thanks for the entertainment, and one more else thing to say. PAUL IS COMING!

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