Wow, I love the perspective of this.
House and Cameron make such a cute couple, loved it!! <33

I really liked this story! I loved the style and flow of it, and House throwing pebbles. Fantastic

You make second person storytelling awesome. Enough said.

PLEASE write another story. Whenever you post something it makes my week. Most authors have a hard time keeping House and Co. in character. You manage to not only capture them perfectly, but offer incredible insight into each of their psyches. I think this story is the best you've written so far. Your earlier stories have had their hard-hitting lines, but this seems the best-constructed; the most complete.

You've got so much talent; far more than I, as a 4.0 creative writing major, could ever hope to have. I'm tempted to say you've got potential (you mentioned being a teenager in one story?), but what you write goes far beyond that. I'm sure you'll improve, of course. But in your most recent stories, you show such polish and masterful form that to call what you have "potential" would be to ignore how brilliant your work already is.

Anyway, please write more. I'm sure plenty of people want to read more from you!

~Melissa

The flow of this story isn't something seen too often, and it fit wondefully. You did a great job with Cameron's POV!
-Hannah

Simply...awesome! *adding you to my favorite authors list*

This was beautiful. I love how flawlessly you incorporated the stream-of-consciousness element with everything that was going on. House and Cameron's conversations were so believable and I could really see Cameron thinking like this. Great job!

Just content, eh? I like that. I like that Cameron truly not happy yet, because House can't replace Cameron's husband and it seems that the poor girl hasn't got over him yet.

Your style of writing continues to amaze me. It's great how you can write a whole, healthy oneshot with not a lot actually happening. (Not to say a lot didn't happen in this one, but that was only a small portion of it. A great deal was descriptions and somehow, you managed to make it all building up to the climax. Great job!)

Anyway, whatever happened to 'Of Home'? I want updates, damnit! =]

This was very interesting, and not just because it's softer than a lot of your other efforts. And by softer, I don't mean of a lower quality.

As usual, the flow is just masterful. I love the end because your imagery is just terrific! There's a lot of intimacy in it without you having to use too much physical description. The whole wind thing is such a small thing and yet so powerful.

Thanks for sharing!

Loved it. Great stuff. You're going onto my author alert list cos I think your stuff is fantastic. =)

nifty

I really liked the flow of this story. It really felt like a story was being literally weaved--in and out from Cameron's thoughts and reality, past to present. There was a lovely poetic feeling to the whole thing.

The only thing I might change is that there were quite a few run-on sentences that made some of the sentences a little long.

Other than that small bit, I thought it was a wonderful little story! :)

oh-so-sweet! and yet--angsty at the same time! I love it! please write more soon!

God, that's good. I love the rhythm of the words and the narrator's voice. Very nice.

That's beautiful, I love it! I love the part where he whispers in her ear, perfectly House with the lust thrown in, great :)