Great story :D

hahaha i make myself laugh!
Nicky picky pie pissing in the sky!
HAHAHAHAHA
You have something i dont have...
A WEENER! A WENER!
HAHAHA you're such a loser!
DWEB
hahahahaha

This made me cry (still sobbing). Because I love Jakotsu and cried when he died in the anime and he loved Inuyasha so much! Or perved after him anyway. Inuyasha/Jakotsu is my favorite pairing, but it's also a very angst filled one. This was a beautiful story, very descriptive. You deserve more reviews.

Ah, Inu-Yasha. I think I got through the first eight manga volumes before I lost interest. (sheepish grin)

That being said, I have no idea who the mentioned people are, or why Inu-Yasha is hunting them, but I found a picture of Jakotsu on the Internet and I fell in love with him immediately. He's such a pretty gay man...

Anyway... "There were massive concave bruises disfiguring the largest into the smallest, like someone reaching in and scooping up great curling slices of stone like ice cream..." I love this. Your figurative language is always so creative and so... so perfect for the situation.

"Hair already infected by dust and greyed twenty years older, the elaborate ornamental pins that had held it in loose, messy confinement now yanked loose and spread around him in tragic piles of puzzlement." This sentence is awkward; it's two modifying phrases pushed together without an actual sentence inbetween.

Inu-Yasha is characterized very well... or at least I think so, from what I've seen of him.

Very well done, as always.

-PharaonicWolf

P.S. The Yu-Gi-Oh characters are SO VERY GAY.