this story is so good, it's well written and the grammar is good. i like seeing the 'great hero' vulnerable for once against his opposite and you've written it in a gripping way. keep going please = ]

woah that doesnt seem finished! dont stop yet! more chapters!

. . . . wah?

Could you put more info into that? I didn't understand a single thing of the situation. I kinda understand what he was going through, but other than that . . . whoosh.

It was good, a little aburpt at the the end, and I'd like to ask a question.

How do you do that heart sign?

yes yes yes i want more! that was such an abrupt ending

oh god i loved this story!! please write more!

that was awesome

It's so sweet! Write more, please! I love this story. I'm adding it to my favorites.