Oh shame on you, you made me cry.

This was beautiful. Simple and elegant, but blindingly powerful and emotionally intense. Chris' thoughts and the comparison to what he actually says...oh, masterfully done. Loved this...so, so much.

I enjoyed the Piper chapter more, but there were still good moments in this one as well. I think the fact that Piper made cookies containing something Chris hates worked especially well - it would have been just too sappy for Piper to intuitively divine (or that she may have noticed in the months and months he'd been around) exactly what Chris's favorite cookie was. Instead, things weren't perfect, but Chris was willing to try it anyway, and you set yourself up with a really nice closing line.

Good first chapter! While so much of it is Piper's thoughts, I like how you ground it in small, everyday, physical details of the manor. And Phoebe's note made me smile. And on to the next chapter...

I cried! You need to write more!

Absolutely brilliant.

Aw... Im sorry, I just watched Bridge to Terabithia, and cried. Hard. And my eyes are trying to glue themselves shut.

That was so sweet! I love the whole, Piper loving Chris, thing. You're right, there wasn't enough bonding between those two. I'm going to your homepage right now to see your other stories!

This was great...

xoxo Tasha

This was really good, and I like the lyrics at the end. I'm off to read the others.

OMG I LOVE THIS STORY SO MUCH I CAN'T WAIT FOR YOU TO UPDTAE YOU HAVE BEEN ADDED THIS IS SUCH A CUTE STORY

This was wonderful. I completely agree with you. They didn't give enough time in the show for Chris to develop closer relationships with his family.

I jsut read the two chapters and have to say that they were brilliant. I loved how you put in Chris and Piper's musings as they watched each ohter. It actually made me cry because you're right, we didn't really get to see lots of mother/son bonding moments considering from where he came from. Actually, I thought that they left a lot about Chris and his story arc unresolved but that's for another time.

I just noticed one or two typos that you go over and reread to correct and yes, American kids call their moms 'mom', not 'mum' but that's it really. It was a great story, I loved it.

I just finished reading both chapters and I have to say that you did a great job. I loved the idea of sunshine rain. I loved the way you wrote Chris and Piper's thoughts. :)

aw that was sweet

This was really good and really sweet! i love how you wrote Piper and Chris' relationship! It's going on my favorites!

Fantastic story, I love how you got Piper and Chris to bond. I look forward to reading your other stories.