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UVlite
2009-12-03 . chapter 12
Gara with Bankai. Sweet!

Some of the earlier Hinata loops were cool.

Genin Alucard and the others in that loop. that is a big mess there.

Over a hundered years in soul society would have been a nice stableising loop for both Ranma and Naruto. Unless the stress of Soifon chasing him for all that time drove him to the edge.

Chapter 6 I don't see Jiriah ever messing with the seel like that.
baduqwa
2009-11-25 . chapter 12
OMG SO AWESOME! Seriously, I laughed a lot. You have some great comedic gold here. Look forward to reading the next installment.
imhotep99301
2009-11-17 . chapter 9
This is a very funny story, I just wanted to point out that you made a minor mistake in the scene where shinji is talking to Diva and Saya on the hogwrats train. You said that both their eyes went red, when in the series only Saya's eyes go red, Diva's eyes go blue.
mastigo
2009-11-15 . chapter 12
This isn't really a review so much as an idea that I had posted on Spacebattles and later thought you might want to look at:

Orochimaru is in a timeloop like those in Innortal's fics. Here's the key point though: canon is loop #542987. Yes I'm saying that canon Naruto was not the first iteration. It actually explains a lot about Orochimaru. The reason why he wants immortality is so that he can finally escape this %#$%^@# loop. He doesn't have perfect memory so he can't script a fight perfectly but he can design survival methods. The reason why he has so many backup survival plans is so his research can get a little farther before he has to @#$#%$ do most of it again. The reason he doesn't mind torturing people and such is that nobody is really hurt by it and it helps him escape this @^%^#$ loop faster. When he finally learns how to be immortal, he'll just kill himself and apply it and then live a life where he's a nice guy and excellent hokage. The reason why he wants the Sharingan and learn all the jutsu of the world is two-fold: first of all it probably could help him learn how to be immortal (and thus escape this $#^%& loop) sooner, secondly he REALLY needed a hobby (because this #$%^%^ loop means he is very bored). The reason he looked like a creepy snake even as a youth was that he implemented survival jutsu as soon as he could (so he could have longer before experienceing this $#^%% loop again. You'll notice that he's a little ... touchy *coughcrazycough* about the whole thing).

this could take a couple of paths but an amusing one-shot version would be that innortal's naruto's loops have all been interesecting with Orochimaru's #542987 loop so neither ever noticed until naruto boasts about his loop induced invincibility, cue Orochimaru freezing and saying "you too?"

The more interesting and serious path would be to instead do a character study of loop #542987 orochimaru.
OrionTheHunter
2009-11-08 . chapter 11
"You look like a man with a very fashionable pair of nostrils."

That line . . . in the context . . . wow. Just wow. I don't remember the last time I was laughing so hard I had trouble breathing. thanks for writing.
The Last Rising Of The Phoenix
2009-10-24 . chapter 12
Oh the pain, my lungs it hurts.

Official last message of TLROTP
Due to death by laughter
End Transmission
Dark Knight Gafgar
2009-10-10 . chapter 12
So you're the reason I've been seeing so many time loop fics around lately. Eh, what the hell. Mind if I take a shot at it in Because I Can?

Also, nice work on the fic itself. Good style.
Story Weaver1
2009-09-15 . chapter 12
Ramengakure.
Best.Idea. Ever!
That loops was very funty and also clever, and something Naruto would do. 'rebuffed by ourselves.'
Gai vs gaio! ROFL!

Jinchuruki Hall of Doom is great oo.
Fully baked plots LOL!

Borg Queen Hinata! Awesomness! Rahr first loopwas hi,arious. Just crazy insanity!
gone119
2009-09-08 . chapter 12
Great story!
hentaidemon7
2009-09-08 . chapter 12
This ** is beyond amusing. please, carry on...
Knightmare0184
2009-09-05 . chapter 1
LOL
Firehedgehog
2009-09-02 . chapter 12
snickers
RockBane
2009-09-02 . chapter 12
I would love to read more of #3's idea! It was so funny!
Lord Edric
2009-09-01 . chapter 12
I want to see more of three please, also I think you should try to add some sailor moon it seem to be the only thing missing
Bobboky
2009-08-31 . chapter 12
excellent work
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