Nice piece of work...keep the good work.

Lovely! I adore these stories when I need a good smut story...awesome installment! I love how the fighting and foreplay came hand in hand.

Awesome story you have here. I thought the end was so sad but hey still great story.

*chuckles* Well at least that got resolved!

excellente!

Ah! It's so great! I love this! I love the way you write. You have a good vocabulary and you word things well, so it's very fun to read. I can't wait to read the next sequel!

I really like this series, can't wait to read more later. You write very well and have a good imagination :)

oh my god! i love this story! it's perfect! drama, sex, and comedy! but now i'm scared to read the rest...it don't want ed to die! well, anyways, you are an AWESOME writer! ^_^

*Breathless and blown away by the sheer brilliance of this story* why haven't I seen this or heard about it before?...this is a CLASSIC EdxWinry story! I LOVE it!! It's brilliant, you write the two of them SO well! I also LOVED the lemony scenes ^^ can't get enough of that.
The ending made me cry...I've never really thought about Ed and Winry getting together and then Ed going off and leaving her...I guess it's because in my mind I wish he'd return after the movie and finally confess to her. But I love your storyline!
I'll be sure to read more of your stories as soon as possible! You write beautifully!
~Colie-chan ^^
EDXWINRY FOREVER! Keep up the excellent work!

This was a really good story. :D It actually had a plot to it, which is rare in these types of stories. The ending was rather bittersweet, though. Very good, but bittersweet. I won't lie, it saddended up a little bit to read Edward's fear about not coming back. But very excellent, nonetheless.

Now, time for my regular dose of constructive critism!!

Everything is really good. Just try and make a few sentances a little shorter... like Pinako's second last speaking line, for instance. It's all written like it's in once sentance. If you could try doing it like this:

"As I said, I don’t like it. But I will, for Winry’s sake. And part of me is glad you did this, it will be too hard on her if you are gone for good without some assurances . . . you do still intend to make her happy until such a time, then?”

It just makes it seem to flow a little smoother, and not seem so jumbled. Whenever I read a sentance like that, I read it as if the character is speaking very quickly. Because there are no breaks, or pauses, or finished sentances (even though most of my sentances in that example above aren't even complete sentances) it just... speeds up in my mind. So if you could work on that, I'm sure your stories would be even more amazing. :D

Also, maybe you should proof-read your work before posting. There are a couple of missing words here and there, and though I get the basic idea of what's being said, or what word you meant to use, some people might not. So after you're done writing it, leave it for a while, like over night if you've finished it in the evening, or if you've finished in the middle of the day, leave the computer for a little while (like an hour or an hour and half or something) and do something else to get your mind off of it. Then, with your eyes fresh and relaxed, read through it again, and you'll spot the mistakes you've made, or words you've missed.

Good work! Keep it up!

I've read more than my fair share...and i have to say. This series that you're writing HAS to be the best i've seen. Keep up the magnificent work! =]

I just read your overhaul stories 1&2. They were very well written! Great job! I can't wait for the next one to come out!

WOW!! I love this series with EdxWinry, your amazing writer! Keep up the excellent work!:)

PS: Winry's 'toy' had me laughing...(lol)

OH MY GOD! I can't believe you wrote this! This was one of my favs on and I had no idea it was you who wrote it! Or that Of Ballets and Bullets was the next installment! I can't believe it. I love both of these stories haha and I never thought you would put this story on Fanfiction did you take it off of Adultfanfiction? But who cares as long as you dont delete it. Haha this is so funny...maybe im just alittle to hyper right now... But in any case I hope you continue in all of your stories.

Maddie Brown

I don't normally read Ed/Winry stuff but this is very good.

You and your dirty mind. tsk tsk. LOL

Do you happen to have a livejournal?