Hey cool!

The description and metaphors used throughout this story are amazing. I greatly enjoyed seeing their relationship being described in the way of them being two halves of one from the day they were born. Not just biologically, but emotionally as well. Which also happens to be a part of my favorite bit of this story:

"We are closer than we could ever be with any lover, and closer too than ordinary brothers because we never knew a time when one of us did not exist. When one of us came into being, the other was created."

Simply beautiful. I love that way of describing their relationship.

I enjoy the way you write, I enjoy the depth that you acheive while just writing fanfiction. I love the bond you have detailed between Hikaru and Kaoru in this story(I've read a few of your other stories, but I must say, this is my favorite, so far.)

Not being half as eloquent as some, all I can say is I very firmly second everything that the reviewer babydragon had to say -- also, being a student of philosophy, I really appreciate the reference to Aristophanes' take on love (now that's just given me some *very* interesting ideas if I were to get an essay question on the Symposium...!). Beautifully written!

wow..i learned something new..^^..love your fic..

This story is absolutely breathtaking - in prose, in characterization, in athmosphere, /everything/. I so adore how you're drawing the lines between the twins and the Greek creation myth, and tying /that/ so neatly up with the renaissance cosplay. The way Kaoru reflects on the bond between him and Hikaru here rings very true to the canon - down to how both of he also know that it is okay, that way. With all the small, but oh-so-poignant details about the rest of the host club, this is easily be the best Ouran fic I have read to this day.

First you inserted music-related things to your fic, then the Greek myths... wahh... somehow I'm looking forward to what you're gonna write in your next Ouran fic!^^

p/s: you're not the only one playing like nekozawa. me too. only that the instrument i mess up with is violin XD.

Wow...I really love this story. It's so...philisophical...and so...unlike Ouran High School Host Club. I think that's why I like it so well! ^^ ~Silver

wow. very nice. a very intellectual peice. and yes, the whole pirate thing is VERY Tamaki

what i really loved about this fic, is the stark comparison between their play-acting and the real tenderness between the twins. what they have, it's not sweet talk and blushing. it's not =romantic=. what it is, is something deep, and real, and something more incomprehensible than love. i love the way the anime, which was so light hearted and humorous, managed to convey the paradoxical fragility and strength of their bonds.

i've never personally known any twin(s) well enough, and i can only imagine the complexity of being in such a relationship. i read somewhere, don't know whether it's true, that the submissive twin tends to think in terms of "we" rather "i". which is what you did in the fic, so i suppose it's fitting. however i do imagine Kaoru would actually be the dominant twin, because i can't feel the sheer =terror= that i get from Hikaru sometimes.

(maybe i should use the word "independent" rather than "dominant". ::shuts down hentai mind:: XD)

one observation i liked very much (and which is why i started musing on the dominant/submssive aspect of the twins) is how Hikaru wants to pull away but is guilty for thinking that everytime. meaning that he can't even think of being with (in any sense of the word) anyone who isn't Hikaru without being torn everytime. whereas Kaoru would willingly push Hikaru towards Haruhi, knowing that what they have, is perpetual.

maybe it isn't that way with twins in reality, maybe it isn't this intimate, maybe it's just me being romantic. but the thought that, no matter what, you're never really alone, is just so... mush-inducing.

i digress. what i want to say is that you capture the twins in a way i find very appealing. i like the way you managed to include all members of the host club in the fic ("let them eat cake!" had me in a fit of giggles. Hani-senpai is so moe! :3) something i found really interesting was how Kyouya cast his magic. i've never thoughtof that ("He makes his audience feel as though they have learned something precious, which is a certain form of flattery in and of itself") because it's such a subtle way to manipulate others, and it's so him.

although this was a twin-centric piece, i wish there was more interaction though, between them and the others. because not that many people can pull that off, but i have a feeling you could do it spot on.

characterisation aside, the writing itself is very impressive. i like the way your words flow -- so pretty! thank you for the lovely fic. ^^

When the earth was still flat,
And the clouds made of fire,
And mountains stretched up to the sky,
Sometimes higher,
Folks roamed the earth
Like big rolling kegs.
They had two sets of arms.
They had two sets of legs.
They had two faces peering
Out of one giant head
So they could watch all around them
As they talked; while they read.
And they never knew nothing of love.
It was before the origin of love.

The origin of love

And there were three sexes then,
One that looked like two men
Glued up back to back,
Called the children of the sun.
And similar in shape and girth
Were the children of the earth.
They looked like two girls
Rolled up in one.
And the children of the moon
Were like a fork shoved on a spoon.
They were part sun, part earth
Part daughter, part son.

The origin of love

Now the gods grew quite scared
Of our strength and defiance
And Thor said,
"I'm gonna kill them all
With my hammer,
Like I killed the giants."
And Zeus said, "No,
You better let me
Use my lightening, like scissors,
Like I cut the legs off the whales
And dinosaurs into lizards."
Then he grabbed up some bolts
And he let out a laugh,
Said, "I'll split them right down the middle.
Gonna cut them right up in half."
And then storm clouds gathered above
Into great balls of fire

And then fire shot down
From the sky in bolts
Like shining blades
Of a knife.
And it ripped
Right through the flesh
Of the children of the sun
And the moon
And the earth.
And some Indian god
Sewed the wound up into a hole,
Pulled it round to our belly
To remind us of the price we pay.
And Osiris and the gods of the Nile
Gathered up a big storm
To blow a hurricane,
To scatter us away,
In a flood of wind and rain,
And a sea of tidal waves,
To wash us all away,
And if we don't behave
They'll cut us down again
And we'll be hopping round on one foot
And looking through one eye.

Last time I saw you
We had just split in two.
You were looking at me.
I was looking at you.
You had a way so familiar,
But I could not recognize,
Cause you had blood on your face;
I had blood in my eyes.
But I could swear by your expression
That the pain down in your soul
Was the same as the one down in mine.
That's the pain,
Cuts a straight line
Down through the heart;
We called it love.
So we wrapped our arms around each other,
Trying to shove ourselves back together.
We were making love,
Making love.
It was a cold dark evening,
Such a long time ago,
When by the mighty hand of Jove,
It was the sad story
How we became
Lonely two-legged creatures,
It's the story of
The origin of love.
That's the origin of love.

*squee* ... This is great. Thank you! This was a breeze to read, but not like eating cotton candy. Oh no. More like sucking on a piece of hard candy; working at it with your tongue easily peeling away layers of sugary goodness, but still having many more layers to go through the hard core. Loved the intro with the 'proto-humans' :D (already read about that in English class) and loved the bit with the Prince and Pauper and how you portrayed _everyone_. You spoil us (the audience)!

I always had two theories on how the twins felt for one another and their reaction to Haruhi, and you very clearly depicted the first, snug in a tailored glove. ^^ XD My god.. I wish it wasn't so late (3:35 AM) or else I'd read "The Devil in the Ballroom". Please, continue.

great fic!the language is excellent and the twins are captured perfectly!even Zeus wouldnt be able to write a fic like this!^_^

Truely eloquent. This was a beautiful thing to read and quite satisfying for me as a fan of the twins. The flow of a few sentences was difficult to follow at times but the substance within more than made up for it. I will come back and re-read this ficlet whenever I may need inspiration because this fic exudes it like a work of art on paper. Thanks for writing it.

your writing is quite incredible! i have so much respect for you, and i love this story.