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| Ice Dragon3 2008-06-30 ch 5,  | abuse-jaw drops- Wow, the ending to this chapter was unexpected! I'm ecstatic to see that Iruka is alive, but wow...I'm still trying to jumpstart my heart. :) One critique would be that most of your paragraphs are one-liners. That's not a terrible thing in itself, but it is an indicator that a bit more descriptive writing wouldn't be remiss. Details help give the setting and characters depth. You have the plot twists down fine; now it's about putting a little meat onto your lovely skeleton. |
| Airily 2008-02-08 ch 5, | abuse:P Had an inkling... Thank you for the story thus far. |
| Airily 2008-02-08 ch 4, | abuse“Kakashi, if you had gotten over Iruka-kun this quickly, I would have killed you.” Uh-huh! Iruka is, was, IS loved!! |
| Airily 2008-02-08 ch 3, | abuseMysterious...mysterious...haven't got a clue ^^; |
| Airily 2008-02-08 ch 2, | abuseInteresting start...don't know what to expect. Didn't expect Iruka to be dead in the first chapter though...:( |
| Anaera9 2007-10-01 ch 5, anon. | abuseThis is an awesome story. Please update! |
| animeodyssey15 2007-07-13 ch 5, | abuseWas that Iruka at the end? The one who was asked, "So, how was your funeral, dead man"? |
| wot 2007-07-13 ch 5, anon. | abusethis is realy tight keep goin! |
| Gasanechi 2007-07-07 ch 5, | abusehm, does this fic have a pairing? is it naru/iru or kaka/iru? and i dont really get the last part, is iruka resurected or smthng? |
| Utena-Puchiko-nyu 2007-07-07 ch 5, | abuseUh...Every time I deal less... ¬¬ Kisses from Argentina! |
| lordtorg22 2007-07-05 ch 5, | abusewtf? iruka=anbu? o_O |
| kit 2007-07-04 ch 4, anon. | abuseGood story. I'm wondering. Is Iruka still alive? Did he fake his own death? Because, if Iruka really did fake his death, It would make some sence with the 'mutual break up'. Iruka could've (dare I say it) broken up with Kakahsi or the other way around to perform a sort of secret mission. Or he could be the hunter! Please, don't let Iruka be really dead!! HE'S MY FAVORITE CHARACTER~! Plus, I don't like the fact that Kakashi and Iruka aren't together anymore. I love that pairing, and well, THEY BELONG TOGETHER! -cries- Anyways, please update soon!! |
| angel of life 2007-06-25 ch 4, anon. | abuseabsolutley adore this rewrite as well as the others I've read (the sidestories). Please update soon and can't wait to read more; keep up the great work. Who is the mysterious ANBU w/ Hinata and Tsunade? Is it Itachi or is it Iruka who faked his death? Please update ASAP!! |
| Utena-Puchiko-nyu 2007-06-24 ch 4, | abuseNice chap! I hate Danzo ¬¬ Kisses from Argentina! |
| Utena-Puchiko-nyu 2007-06-23 ch 3, | abuseI love it! But... Iruka is realy dead? Please no! T_T Iruka is my favorite character! *_* |