Normally, I would point that you overused “Sir”. However, since this word is the part of title. Then it is very creative way to emphasize the theme . ^_^ Great job ! this is one of the most beautiful Royai that I have ever read.

I like this! Haha, I'd never really thought about the shampoo Riza would use. I like the idea you came up with. This is a very good scene, I love the description of her smile at the very end.

i really enjoyed this ! you describe them beatifully , congratulations

I'm almost confused, becuase there are places I want to place this in the anime, even the manga, but I know I can't because you said you can't.

That aside...this was well written. Interesting. Captivating--it drew in my attention and held it well. His observations, her reactions all seemed perfect. I liked it. Please keep writing!

loved everything, especially the mention of Riza's scent and her sleepy discription. overuse of sir but wonderful story. Roy in pink! HA!

Ja Ne! :D :)

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Aww. It was a *beautiful* oneshot, with slight humour. Although you might be overusing the word "Sir" a little.

Nevertheless, you did wonderful job :3

Ah crap, I don't even have the right words for it, but I'll do my best.

I thought I'd say first that I thought you used "sir" a little more than necessary, but it didn't distract me from all the beautiful things about the fic.

I love the soap. I think it's because it's different--not just Dove or Dial, or whatever. I loved the imagery of Roy washing blood out of his hair, and the fact that you compared the shower to a rain storm.

I was a little surprised to find Roy in that pink dress. Frightening image, that. But funny too! You wrote the humor in this story in such a delicate way, if that makes sense. Everything's so subtle and not so blatant. Even the way she tells him that her bed is on the couch. It's all nicely done. As other reviewers have said, even though there's little action in the fic, you made the simple actions so poetic and it just worked really well.

I like all the references to Riza's dad too, and the way she straightens Mustang's hat on his head and moves the hair from the eye bandage.

So I'll shut up. But that was just a beautiful fic. I seriously didn't know how to review it. Thanks for sharing!

Very vivid, if altogether too brief, view into the complex and wonderful relationship that is Royai. Interesting take, leaves the reader wondering what exactly happened to Roy that needed him to be rushed off to safety by Riza... but, regardless of that, makes us all go "squee" because we're so happy for the shippy-ness going down here.

Well written. I'd like to see more Royai from you.

This story is of an exquisite quality :) Maybe a little too often paragraphed - there were some places I noticed where it wasn't necessary, but surprisingly it made it easier to read. Some of the stories with longer paragraphs are harder to get through sometimes.

I love the way that you've managed to put a lot of detail into not too much action. Sometimes that turns out terribly, and boring, but this has just amplified the thoughtful side of it. You don't have a lot of dialogue, and you don't need it. You have some fantastic wording in it, too! The line "my bed is already organised on the couch, sir" is surprisingly forceful, and it's come out perfectly.

I especially love the line "and his body was fast presenting bills for overdue sleep". My mind keeps going over it and seeing how it could be altered, because it doesn't /quite/ seem right, but I love the image it gives.

All over, a masterpiece :) Fantastic job!

Once again princess, a very good fic. For a story that didnt have a whole lot of action and goings-on, it was pretty enjoyable to read. Excellent use of dialogue and descriptive language, though sadly no Roy x Ed :( I dont care how the anime and manga are supposed to go, Roy wants Ed and Hawkeye will just have to deal with it!

I like this. It is very nicely written.

This was really good, but you overused 'sir' a lot. Sir is usually said after a direct command or greeting or before asking a question, such as "Permission to speak, Sir?" Hope that made sense. Other than that, it was well written.

Nice, I like the detailed-ness. (Hm. I highly doubt that's an actual word. Oh well.) The hinted RoyRiza was very well-done, and IC. Just one thing, though, Riza's constant 'Sir'ing felt a little overused; having her say 'sir' at the end of every single sentance towards the end felt too repetitive. But a very nice job over all.