I have to say, this story is one of your masterpieces

You outdid yourself with this one...LOVE it! Best watanuki and doumeki fic ever! Doumeki is such a perverted character in this one..and I like him even more for it hehe

yes! ** perfect *applauds*

thank you so much for creating this gem *g*

amazing story
good work :)

Meh. It won't let me favorite the story without commenting.
But I've already commented (even if it WAS unsigned...but I unsigned it in my name! Gah!)
Well, yeah. *scuffs foot*
It was amazingly well-written, even if I didn't get all of the first-person to third-person transitions.
I loved it immensely.

Wow, that was an awesome story! It took me like, one hour to finish it, but that's just me...and besides, it was awesome! DouWata will forever be the best couple out there...*smirk*
All in all, it was FANTASTIC, especially the oh-so-amusing ending. Mmph.
Nice work!

YES I KNEW IT! I KNEW Watanuki,and Doumeki,would have sex together and I knew Doumeki would be the one on top!XD

god i just love the ending. it, in a very sexy and weird way, makes a lot of sense. poor wata-chan!

i read this story like every 3 months. it is honestly one of my favorite fanfics ever. and every time i re-read it i love it even more

You did a poor job in using the first person. I think you should have placed us more securely on the character's point of view and let us have a good grip of what's happening, how it's affecting him and how he's going to react THROUGH HIM, instead of merely telling us these as though we were just witnessing things over his shoulder. It was like the third person was simply using "I","my","me" etc. which ruins most of it. It was very awkward and frustrating especially around the middle when they were having sex. It was like a teacher discussing the mechanics in doing it, Or like reading a sign that says "Insert Coin" or "Tear here". I don't think someone like Doumeki would use the terms "**" or "anus" even out of spite.
How did they even end up doing it anyway? We know how angry Doumeki was because of what Watanuki did, but how does that lead to sex? And Watanuki, one second he's really upset then he's suddenly into it too? Even if they did have secret desire for each other, was that the right time? That was kinda uncalled for. And while we're at it, why did it seem so easily done, sex that is. Watanuki himself pulled Doumeki into him. Doesn't he need some sort of preparation for that (whether it was his first time or not)?
And the part where Watanuki tasted like sugar (and nutmeg and flour and cinnamon and egg and lukewarm water and egg yolks and whites.. amazing how he learns from Watanuki). I don't think it's likely that he'd eat Watanuki's cake when he's supposed to be ignoring him. That'd be unfair now wouldn't it?

Perhaps you could've started with fluff at first to give a chance for them to make up with each other. The sex can wait. Perhaps a little adjustment in the kitchen scene??

Nice opening though, it was enough to keep us clinging to that hope that it will be worth it. Doumeki's anger was good to read. As I've said, using that point of view is a challenge to many.

Okay first... Doumeki's a pervert with a purpose and his thoughts about Watanuki are all... Oh So Funny...
Second... I ndon't ever wanna mess with spiders again... Creepy little bastards...
Third... I love this conversation the most...
“I saved you from the ghosts plaguing you.” I said and it never got old the way his face lit up in horror and embarrassment.

Watanuki summoning all the lung capacity that resided within his small body, bellowed out, “THEN WHO’S GOING TO SAVE ME FROM YOU?!”

“No one.” I said, as I stalked up to him.

SO FUNNY!
FAVORITE!

hahahaha..OMG..so funny!! i love your story!! keep writing more!

why is the story suddenly becomes something like this? ehhe..confusing..

it melted mine too..hahaha..

hahahah..my hormones are messed up too! lols..