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Reviews For: Ranko Tendo

Zero of the Black Knights 2006-07-17 ch 1,	abusehow ranma no kachu tenshin armiguriken and mouko takabisha?
Lord Kamui 2006-07-13 ch 1,	abuseWell, I can't talk about english grammar since I'm from a country which main language is spanish and you can see I make lots of mistakes :P. About the fic itself I must say that I'm a little lost... Since Ranma know his ki attack, I can tell that he already fought against Ryouga's the shishi houkodan. And if that's the case, then did he already meet the Tendo's? I think you must explain a little more the differences between this universe and the normal Ranmaverse. What's the basic difference? did he meet Shampoo much later? or is it that he and Ryouga have found each other some times before Jusenkyo? Anyway, I like this story and really hope that you will continue this work.
Natalie-E-G 2006-07-11 ch 1,	abuse1. The story is being rushed. It feels like a 30 second version of War and Peace. You just barely catch highlights. Slow down and develop. 2. I dearly hope you are from a country where there is no version of English that is native. Please get a proof reader. Your grammar is horrid, and you are constantly choosing the wrong word. If you are from a non-English speaking country this can be forgiven but many readers will be so turned off by the grammar they will never read the story. It does appear to have been spell checked, at least I did not notice spelling errors. 3. The story has potential. Similar ideas have been presented in the past but each development has been different and enjoyable, yours planned story might be also. 4. Do not take my comments as personal attacks and do not let them stop you from writing as you see fit. I just a critic, if I could write I would. I can't so you at least have that up on me.
Mr.Staypuft 2006-07-11 ch 1,	abusegreat start keep it up
Ranchee 2006-07-11 ch 1,	abuseWow you are off to a real good start i wonder why shampoo did not give up she coul;d have tried to bring here into tribe.This seems to ba a real good start for a story,reall good.
AshK 2006-07-11 ch 1,	abuseGood start! Please update soon! Sincerely, AshK
Dumbledork 2006-07-11 ch 1,	abuseNice start.
iceland 2006-07-11 ch 1,	abuseit was good story to read and wondering what the tendo's think of ranko tendo when she gets to the dojo. what will they do when they find out about her memory problem.

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