Nice, long, descriptive chapter here! I enjoyed the plethora of dialogue contained in this chapter, and the tidbits of fighting taking place. I just have one small bit of constructive criticism to offer here. Most of the time, I've noticed that Laguna speaks rather formally. That just seemed a bit weird, unless that came about as a part of his job as President. No offense meant!

All the same, though, this is looking very interesting, and I can't wait to see how Tress fits in in Celestial Garden. Keep up the good work!

Tress is becoming a very well-rounded character, with his own set of troubles; it's very nice to see an honestly original character. I'll be reading!

Very nice first chapter. It's nice how things are developing and your "Tress" character is being introduced as a splendidly dynamic person. Keep up the good work and I hope to see a second chapter soon enough!