Guh! This is BRILLIANT. I know it's been half a year since the last update, and you may have decided to leave this story unfinished, but I ardently hope that you consider continuing...it's the most beautiful Zelda story I've read. Ever.

Interesting very interesting, it adds a unique perspective to the story. I'm looking forward to reading more good choice on the accents as well.

Sorry it took so long for me to review! I'm so glad to have finally gotten the chance to read this chapter!
What an excellent way to end this section, too, with Zelda's conflicted thoughts on Ganondorf. There was a wonderfully thought-provoking notion in there that you've implemented: whether or not Zelda desires to give significance to her dreams, rather than just allowing them to become manifest on their own. I love the idea that Zelda fears her dreams hold no such significance, and longs desperately to give them that which they lack.
I'm probably reading too much into this--I hope I'm not coming off as a madwoman, haha :)--but I'm beginning to truly love, in somewhat of a sick way, how Zelda is slowly becoming her own antagonist. How she is plaguing herself--and this is before Ganondorf's true intentions really come into the picture!!
Someone's going to have an emotional meltdown when that happens *cough*ZELDA*cough*.
*cackle*
Wow, Selah! I have so many thoughts on this, and although I've just blabbered on--perhaps incomprehensibly--about merely a fraction of them, I don't think I could, or should, ramble on any longer.
I'll save it for the next update ;)! Great work, as always!

--evanesced

PS- I've posted something for you on DA! It's nowhere near completion, but I thought I should let you know about it now, since I've already failed to ask your permission about it (if I could use a theme from Moonstruck as the subject of the illustration).
I miss seeing you around, there!

Ah, and my wish has been granted!

To compare Zelda and Malon, for a while. Zelda is much more mature than Malon, undoubtedly a product of her royal upbringing (assuming they're the same age), yet her naivity -- her childishness -- is ever present, just as in Malon. This is probably most clear here, 'how she hated him, she hated the boy', where she attempts to shift the responsibility of her 'treachery' onto the other person involved.

When she decides Ganondorf is evil, too, illustrates it well. This assertion seemed to be born from a desire not to become married -- to a Gerudo, of all things! -- and was a convenient way to explain her dreams (her 'Transcendence', if you will). However correct she turned out to be is irrelevant.

And speaking of comparisons, this chapter was probably the most focused, and clear, yet (hence the more focused review, I suppose). Maybe you're more clear on how to progres Zelda's side of the story or maybe you're more confident in writing for Zelda than for Malon; either way, this is my favourite chapter so far.

Keep up the good work!

~Lefty the Right-Handed Shark.

“What good can come of marrying a barbarian?”

What kind of insolent question is that!?




Onto more important things though than my pathetic ramblings: your stories never fail to being out in me great obsession and a bubbling imagination. =D Keep writing and put people like Stephen King and JK Rowling to shame! (One day... one day you'll show them just how to write a fantasy fiction... *mutters to self while rocking in straitjacket* -_-;;)

"They’re like wolves... except... different." I like that. It highlights a couple of things: his upbringing in the forest -- his isolation from the outside world -- and the resulting naivity. (Also, it's just plain cool.)

Malon overhearing the gossip about Zelda was nicely done; it's a nice reminder that there is another side to this story. I am looking forward to seeing more from the princess and Ganondorf, actually.

And... I've forgotten what else I was going to say. So.

Lefty.

So we're finally introduced to Link! I love how well you've been able to keep your slightly more AU ideas in line with the plot of OoT :). I must say, too, that my impression of Connor, when he was first introduced, had changed very much into a negative one, by the end of the chapter. You've developed every character so well!
Enjoy your vacation time (and don't worry about 'cleaning up' this chapter, especially since I see nothing wrong with it)!!

--evanesced

Yes, a new chapter. I was wondering when this was going to be updated. Well as always, the dialect was a delight and I like your characterization of Malon. She seems to be intelligent and perceptive, yet within the boundaries appropriate for a child. Good job and I look forward to future updates.

I haven't been on in a while, so this chapter is a wonderful 'welcome back', for me :)! I really love how you've developed Malon's character--especially through her little crush on Connor. And, once again--the dialogue!! It's fantastic! You've done a wonderful job illustrating the difference between regions of Hyrule with the accent of each character!
Keep Moonstruck going! I'm seriously hooked to it!

--evanesced

I apologise for taking so long to review, but won't bore you with reasons or excuses.

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On accents: You said before that they are an integral part of the story, and I can see now that they are, which presents a small problem, in my eyes. Occasionally (not always) it takes a second or two to decipher some of the characters' dialogue, or I just do not take in what they are saying. This may be more influenced by the lateness of the hour and my inability to focus for long, but I feel it warrants some thought.

An example, "The funereal." You meant funeral and not the adjective, funereal, I presume. Well, I didn't stumble over that, but it illustrates my point.

On Malon: She seems to oscillate between perceptiveness and hyperbole, which creates an interest effect. I know she's probably not the most reliable narrator, but I'm inclined to believe her anyway. She's quite likeable, which helps.

On pace: It's perfect. Most fiction on this site seems to lack pace, which makes this most refreshing.

I'm favouriting it; I hope you stick with Moonstruck for a while yet.

LtRHS (who formerly signed his reviews, "Crazymark")

You're a brilliant writer, and I'd love to see more of this. I love the way you've woven in so many different things and it makes this story so distinctly different-- I've never read anything quite like this! I anxiously await your next installment to see what you do with this. :D

Hello, again. This story is comming along very well. Your patience never ceases to amaze me; the all of the chapters, so far, are very detailed and in-depth, set at a leisurely pace with such flawless articulation. I was especially impressed with your use of vocabulary and your constant referance to myths throughout all of the chapters. I also noticed that your outward description of the character matches their personality and traits. (I noticed this most with Connor).

Well done, bravo! Keep it up!!

Well, I'm glad to see that you have updated. As always, I loved the use of dialect and the plot around Malon's mother intrigues me. I can't wait to read another chapter. Please update soon.

This story is definitely one of the most original on in my opinion, and I love the incorporation of the Celtic myth. Also, I love your use of dialect and your use of prose. I just have one question though, the first chapter is the present and the last three chapters are the past that work up to that present? Is it kind of like chapters 2-4 are flashbacks? I am sorry if this making no sense. Just keep up the good work and update as soon as possible.

Oh, wow. Thus, the plot thickens even further. Again, your articulation is beautiful; I love the imagery and colloquialism that you use. Also, the voices of all the characters are very distinct. Well done!