i'm not really into the whole powerful or experianced Neville!

I love your story so far. It's great!

I like your story so far.

Draco asking "is dad evil" is a very nice touch, makes us remember how child like and innocent he really is..you seem to have him acting more mature in this story..like a calm respectable pureblood child should..that little outburst proves that he's human.

Very intriguing with Lucius being gone...and draco thinking him dead..i suppose this is going to make him lose his trust in his mother.. I want to hear more about this situation. how will draco be changed without his fathers influence?
Do you think you could elaborate a bit on how he managed to nick a wand and how he knew those spells inthe first place? Has he been regularly sneaking into his parents private library to learn before school does he have a private tutor or does narcicessa just encourage him to learn ahead of his peers? I always found it odd that 11 was the age when hogwarts started...i mean are pureblood kids taught to control their magic sooner...do they get a wand before thier 11th birthday...i mean obviously they don't just "come into their magic" because there has been uncontrolled magic before kids reach 11. I like the touch of Snape calling Draco brat..almost like a term of endearment. Though i think you should add in a bit more sarcasm or atleast bluntness or even extremly complex..knowlegable sentances to snapes dialog..its pretty obvbious that he was a book worm..and is a very smart man. Just need to bring a little bit more into his character.

I'm not enjoying the chapter on neville (i think i mispelled his name) I like him as a character and i like that you are going to have him friends with Harry personally i thought he was a more interesting character than ron..but thats the thing..you aren't letting much of Nevilles personality show through in this and the transaction is a bit boring and confusing.
On to Harry and his friend...The snake next to the wolf cub..why didn't it talk to harry...or was it snape? can you elaborate a bit more on that entire scene..it was a little rushed. I like that you are using snape to look out for harry..especially against DUmbledores wishes...and i like that you are having Harry's orphanage experience to be diffrent than how most portray tom riddle's. QUite a few fiction i have read has Harry going through the same motions as Riddle and this is a nice change. Ok..i wanted to get all that out before i forgot..please don't take it as a flame please use peoples suggestions and critisism to help you improve your writing.

Looks like a good story so far...
I look forward to reading more...

Will Harry, Draco and Neville be friends? Keep updating please cos its a good fic.

this story is great! I can't wait for a update!

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