It's a cute story. It took me a while to piece together the italian from the words at the bottom of the page. But the italian was a nice touch, even if it isn't quite right (not that I would really know!)

Aw, that's so cute! Great! I love Guido he's sweet.

I'm not a big fan of slash but I must say I found this rather well done. I love Italians, the Italian language, Italian food...Heck, almost anything Italian. :} Tremendous job, I almost felt a little choked up.

I'm sorry to bored you, is a great story, but I'm Italian and some terms that you did used are incorret for the contest:

Forever = persempre

God = dio

Boy = ragazzo (never my grandma' use giovinetto for call the Boy)

I = io (a me = to me)

you = tu (a te = to you)

not = no

To = ... I think is not translated alone

so = così... ex you are so beaut... = tu sei così bello/a
(what is orbene?)

Sweet = dolce, amabile

Me = me, io, (me stesso = myself)

never = mai (nobody use giammai)

him = lui

He = lui (egli)

excuse me for my correction but I think Is a costructive criticism ^_^

This was ultra-cute! The Italian was a nice touch. The third paragraph is the sweetest! Keep up the great work. :)

tu sei italiana?

That was... beautiful. I loved the little Italian bits. =D

Cute cute cute CUTE! =3 I love those two! Great little fic!