Hey, are you going to continue this story? I really really really really want to see what happens! Please please please please please update the story!

heh, of all the times for Netto to be in the hospital ^^; somebody's gonna be a little angry that they missed out on the action.

missing that, the suspense is good methinks. I'm already wonderin why the heck Yuuichiro doesn't want Search and Blue to shoot yet, especially if he knows that the navi attacking is the one who almost killed his boys. I'll hazard a guess at protectin the data that he's downloading.

Most importantly though...what the heck is Forte doing? Crazy navi, can't turn your back on him for a second >.> I look forward to figuring out what the heck is going on.

anyways, i hope for an update soon! Good luck with doing so ^^

Update! Update! Update!

*squee!* This fic is so good! X3 Hehe, Enzan and Laika are seeking revenge! *laughes maniacly(sp?)* I always love seeing freiends seek revenge (OMG I think that rhymed >__< Good luck finding a job! Can't wait till your next update! ^^

ZOMG! Thank Gawd Netto and Rockman are ok. The story's progressing really well. Keep it up! Just a quick pointer - you just need to watch your punctuation. You go girlfriend!

I'm going to start off this review by talking about something other than the chapter. Your summary is one of the most important things you can write, as it's the thing that gets potential readers' attention. You have a limited amount of space to do it, so you need to do it well and be very careful of grammatical mistakes. I like the content of your summary, but there are a few mistakes that are somewhat offputting to potential readers. "Stealer" is not a word. "Thief" would probably work better. "Dr" needs a period. There needs to be a comma after "that is" and you might want to say "upon the world" instead of "on the world." I would also advise that you don't ask for reviews in the summary or admit that this is your first fic. Many people will avoid stories that do that, as they consider first stories to have the greatest chance of not being very good, and asking for reviews before people even read is considered a bit tacky, especially if you use Netspeak.

Anyway, on to the chapter itself. I think you've improved greatly on your pace since the last chapter. I'm no longer getting that "rushed" feeling about it and the flow from one thing to the next is logical and reasonable. There's a few grammatical mistakes here and there, but nothing to be alarmed over. Have you considered getting a beta reader? Beta readers are an author's best friend when it comes to catching little mistakes. I usually have two or three people read through my stuff before I put it up, but that's just me.

I now pause to cheer for someone who knows how and when to use the word "brusquely" and can spell it correctly. It's a small thing, but it still makes me happy to see people who have good vocabulary and know how to use it.

The chapter was great. The scene in the hospital worked well to give readers a break from the action, but you didn't let things get too boring by focusing entirely on Netto's recovery. It was very cute to see Haruka and Dr. Hikari react to Netto waking up. I'm looking forward to seeing what happens with Enzan and Laika, too. It's good to see that no one is being able to resolve their difficulties too easily. That wouldn't make for a good story at all.

Keep up the good work!

Great story!
I really enjoy this.
wonder what will happen next...

hmm...Interesting beginning?
is this like the megaman Ex on TV? I like that show, the guys are cute.

For a first fic, this is actually pretty good. You've got decent spelling, grammar, and paragraph structure and you seemed to have a well-thought out idea for where you're going. Some authors like to jump right into a fic without any idea of what they actually want to DO with it, and it usually shows. Kudos to you.

Characterization throws me a little off because most of my experience with the series has been through the Japanese subtitled episodes. I've only seen enough of the dub to know that the characterization is somewhat different. Your characterization "feels" all right, though, so I'm not concerned about it.

The only area I can think of off the bat that you might consider improving is flow. There's just some times where it feels a little rushed, that's all. It might help if there was a little more content in each chapter, but a "good" chapter length is really a matter of opinion.

All in all, I think you're off to a good start. Keep up the good work!

Awesome chapter. Keep it going please? I wanna know what Forte will end up getting up to.

FO *deep breath* ORTE!
*tackle glomp of uber fangirlisms* This is great! A fic where Forte finally makes his brilliant move to destroy the world! WAHAHAHAHAHA!

Jerome: >>() You're too excited about that, somehow...

And that was sweet, Enzan being concerned about Netto. Normally he's too busy being Netto's rival. ^^ This was a great chapter! Continue, please!

Hey! Not bad for a first fanfic. Keep it going and when are we going to find out what happens to Rockman and Netto?!

Hello again! No reviews? Oo That's just plain wrong I tell you... *drags in reviewers* XD

You're deleting Rockman? No! T.T At least Blues and Enzan are on the way to totally annahilate Duskman. XD

Please continue! You've got a good story here, so don't lose heart! ^^

How about, Duskman? That has a dark connotation. XD

Interesting... I wonder what Yuichiro is going to discover! I really want to know! ^^ So continue! Please! ^^