O, please tell me there is going to be more of this.

tell me ...tell me...
what's going 2 happen 2 Leorio and Kurapica
please!
i'm dying here
hurry up and finish it quickly!!
i love it
^_^

Wow!! This was wonderfully written!! It was hard to find problems with it and the plot was great.

Title: Pretty good, especially the slightly more advanced words you chose (Macabre, specifically--I had to check that up in the dictionary, pardon my thirteen year old simple vocabulary...XD)

Sumary: I didn't really understand the summary until I read it over again after reading the story--it contains a spoiler (...leads Kurapika into the employ of the Makavoy Family) That's kind of confusing, because so far the story led me to think the Makavoys were the 'enemies' in the story. But then again, it's only been 2 chapters--maybe you intend to make the majority of the story about Kurapika's job at the Makavoys and Leorio's kidnapping is kind of an introduction? Although, before I read the story I thought the summary sounded interesting, so points for that.

Plot: Feels completely original!! At least I've never read a HXH fanfic with a plot like this one--I loved it! Although I would rather you add Gon and Killua in, but that would probably be asking a bit too much, since the fanfic is centered around Kurapika...

Characterization: Hmm...I think Leorio was perfectly in character, although I did have some doubts about Kurapika (I doubt he'd ever say Leorio was trying to 'play hero', since that should be one of the traits he likes best in Leorio) But other than that, Kurapika was in character!

Style/Spelling/Grammar: I loved your choice of vocabulary and imagery--I could have pictured the scene with perfect clarity. The only paragraph I didn't like was the one after the first sentence. It wasn't really smooth, mostly because ALL of the sentences were long. I'd advise breaking apart some of them.

Well, nothing else to say (Heck, what ELSE could I say? Your writing is practically perfect!!), so just keep writing!! ^_^

Oh, by the way, I opened an account at your site, reviewmetro--I'm not really sure how things work there though (for example, is a thread ever closed? Like, if it's over 6 months old or something?)

this promises to be exiting!kurapik's going to help leorio right? keep going!

Wow, its very intense! I really like the way I can truly feel the emotion. It's so sad though... If you have an ending in mind I really hope it's happy. I don't have much to add except to encourage you to stick with it!^-^ Update soon!
-kiseki-girl