You should update because I really like this story! Pretty please with sugar on top?

So this was just a sample from a different story on the website not relating to the first chapter story line but just one or two of the main characters ?

Interesting ending to the story. Or is it over ? I will keep an eye open for this one.

well, finally a decent fanfic, indiana jones one, i mean...this is quite nice, okay, it's great. you ought to continue, considering the number of reviews you have

Well...I thought that since I could, I'd try to give the most constructive review I could to help this entertaining piece become better.
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Millennium was being chased by the undead, and for some reason they were wearing tutus and screaming at her that she hadn’t finished the math assignment. Then she was in her Utah high school, kissing the freckle-face that had been her history tutor.(1) Then she was back at the dig site in Saudi Arabia, outside old Dedan with a bunch of hairy diggers she’d dragged across the continent following a hundred different red herrings. (2))And she really needed to pee.
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Entertaining. I just wanted to tell you that this beginning is a nice change from the usual, and instantly dumps the reader into an interesting tale.

However...

1: You make things move at a much quicker pace than they might really need to go. The reader cannot descipher whether or not they are still in the dream or are back in the present. As such, you might want to give more of indictation that the time that the character is in has switched. Example: Instead of using "then" to bring us back to now time, maybe go...

Millenium bolted upwards, blinking in the inky darkness of her tent, and groggily tried to regain thought-process back.

Where was she?

Oh, yeah.

Saudi Arabia. Dusty, desolate, deserted and dry.
*Once again: give us a transitional phrase that can help the reader understand what is going on.

2: When this line, we get the feeling that the fact that Millenium has to go pee comes as a second thought. Therefore, "...And she needed to pee." might be more called for.
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Groaning, she groped out of the old pup tent she had refused to share with anyone. It was October, and the nights were chilly to say the least, but as the only woman on the site, she was bound and determined to keep her moral integrity, even if she froze to death. Since no one was up, she made no secrecy about hiding the roll of toilet paper when she got back; it was her last roll, and no one was going to use it up, so help her God. Lenny didn’t actually believe in God, but she didn’t reject the idea. Her religion was archeology, as Belloq had so eloquently put it years ago. What had happened to him, she wondered. Had he ever actually found something of great importance, or was he really reduced to stealing other people’s finds, like she heard a while back?
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Good exposition, however: drag everything out. Your story is moving at a rather quick pace--though this might be good for something brutally short, for a tale such as this, more detail and flow will only make the story better.

I believe that those are the main faults with this entertaining story. So...

1: Try to avoid using "then" as a transitional word and istead focus more on descriptive adjectives and whatnot that can make the entire section FLOW more. It's all about the flow. The more flow you give the reader, the more interested they become.

2: Drag everything out if you can. Remember: it's all in the details. The more details you can give the reader, and the more you can "bulk up" the story, the more interesting and (shocking, I know) fun it can become.

If you have any questions, feel free to PM.

Cheers:
LF

Terribly mysterious, seems to be going very da Vinci code-ish, although there are some horribly distracting typos, especially in that paragraph at the beginning that starts off "Two months..."

GREAT story! I love the Indiana Jones movies, and this is the best fanfic I've read so far! please R&R one of mine if you want.

good story!

More interesting than anything I've seen around here in a good long time, so ya got me there. For a second I was afraid you had it out for the Church and that sorta thing just don't set well with me(being Catholic and all), but so far you're cool. Of course your main character seems to have it out for us.

Oh! And by the by, antichrist orignally meant one who was against Christ, not the one who's gonna bring about then end of the worlds, so it really doesn't have any baring at all in the time of King Solomon. The term your probably looking for is false prophet. I'm a history major along with being Catholic so I know these things.

Still interested in what your gonna do with the rest of it.

History tutor? THat's kind of a strange thought. This is cool, though. Very well written. The beginning was a hook if I ever saw one. Those would be the famous unsaid words of my Writting teacher.

Sincerely,
(signed)Nathaneal Jacobs

OH! Scary ravens! I LOVE Indiana Jones, I LOVE a good fanfiction, I LOVE archiology adventures! my point is- I LOVE THIS STORY!

tis cool

OMG I LOVED THIS! If it's just a one-shot perfect ending, but this could be a good story!

GAH! Write more... you thing

I doubt I have anything to review, but I'll review you anyway.

AWESOME! I totally loved it. I think you should try another chapter..I wanna know what the ravens mean, if you even know yourself ^.^