ooh i know, have cloud bump into Hojo and then have Seph save clouds butt and beat up hojo...or something.

I really love this story. I hope you make a new chapter soon. I know how hard it is to get something done. Good luck with your work.

Devilgirl255

omg... this is the greatest story EVER! i lurv it. update soon please!

this is so funny... It's weird how these three are like friends. I've only seen the movie and enough of the game to understand the movie. I've also seen some of the weird, 4 episode anime they had going but this is even before that which is before the game, which is before the movie. So basically I'm watching/reading all these things backwards.

Oh well, This chapter is awesome! (and thanx for listening to my mindless twadle.)

Heh, awesome!

Please, please, PRETTY PLEASE write more of this!
This was absolutely fantastic, and I want, nay, CRAVE MORE!
*Puppy dog eyes* please?

LMAO! I love Zack! He's such a fun character! Your character were really dynamic and what's the word...foil! Zach and Sephiroth foiled each other well. XD However, i feel like you could do better with Cloud. I felt like I had a harder time grasping his character.

You definitely improved in the less speech, more action department. ^^

Keep up the great work!

How depressing...I'm not one to inspire your imagination and make you write?

Hello! Me again... heh heh ^_^

Thanks! You what for. And I really liked the update, though there were more spelling errors than the first chapter. I'm figuring it's because your fingers were flying with cool ideas and didn't have time to do damage control. I'd be happy to Beta for you if you're interested. And yes, this chapter, though late, was GREAT!

I liked Cloud and Zack getting drunk while Seph read a book. I can totally see it! ^.~ And spewing in the back of Seph's car... Really! Disgusting. And how do you get the smell out even if you do clean the stuff up? Yeck!

I think Zack taking care of Sephiroth during his "cold" could prove more trouble than it's worth. Maybe Cloud could actually help? I think he's got more of a head on his shoulders even if he's majorly intimidated by the GREAT GENERAL SEPHIROTH! *snickers behind one hand*

Don't be a stranger now, kay? I like the writing, even with mistakes, and the story has just begun! I've got you on my alerts and will check in occasionally just in case FFnet doesn't hold up their end of the bargain and fails (again!) to notify me when another chapter is updated.

Fun chapter and keep it up! Thanks!

Nicely done yet again, Rase-chan! ^-^ I can't wait to read more!!

Hey! Where's the rest of the story? I want to hear if Cloud gets himself drunk and makes a fool of himself in front of his idol or if he is the more cautious sort and redeems himself somewhat after his little worshipful moment. And how's Zack going to act? He's promised to take Seph and Cloud drinking, but he can be quite a partier, so I could just see him getting carried away and being carried away by both Cloud and Sephiroth. I've always seen Cloud as more like Seph than Zack anyway, so it would be great if the two were in agreement about one black, spikey headed SOLDIER First Class. hehe

I read through the story and didn't come across any spelling or grammar errors, though I'm sure even if there were, the story took care of itself well enough that they weren't glaringly obvious. You write well and the story is interestingly presented. It kept my interest up anyway. So please continue and update soon! And I promise to review faithfully, every single chapter as your reward. Oh! And send you cyber chocolates too! Okay?

I thought it was kind of stupid how Cloud was practically fantasizing over Sephiroth and was, "honored to even walk in his holy presence". I hate and scorn fangirl-ism. So please
try to keep that to a minimum. But other than that, I like the developing relationship. Please don't make this relationship between them too complicated. I see so many other times where people dig themselves into deep holes with almost no way to get out. Also, will this be a Sephiroth/Zack/Cloud romance? I haven't come across too many of those, I guess people aren't very fond of threesomes.

wow great storey. I cant wait till chapter 2 comes out again. I really liked how down to earth you made the characters. you did a great job. Please finish

Great. Just...great!

Great start! Feel kind of sorry for Cloud. Keep up the great work!