Nice one :)

Loved it. It was very deep and agsty, yet still very Bartimaeus-y in its effect.

Nice. In character, and angsty Bartimaeus is hard. The short paragraphs are effective. Good job. :)

Very good! I love angsty oneshots (having written a few in my day...)! I particularly loved the lines:

"It's ironic, really. You wanted to be remembered for all eternity.

And you are.

By no one but me."

Well done! Keep it up.

Seshata

X_X Excellent I didnt know you had it in you, WOnderful. You captured a more tender side and the drabbish style of wrting always attracts me. I could not believe you had written this, excellent job

Aw, so sweet...keep up the writing!