Stunning. The style of writing conveys such wonderful emotion and imagary - excellent job, I like this *quite* a lot.

Wow. That was... I don't know how to express it. You have very strong writing. But you probably experienced sth like this and you can describe it. Very good. I look forward to next chapters.

Great. I love your writing style. Very interesting and poetic, I want to see what happens next (will they get out and what happened in the first place?) Keep writing and updating! What does the title mean?

Very interesting, I would like to see more of it. Until later,

Layelleswen

This puts us right there in his panic/ked refusal to admit panic.

Very clever and atmospheric. I hope you let them escape!