I like this story! Not many people follow the idea of Zuko actually presenting Aang to Ozai...but you've pulled it off splendidly! I hope you're still writing this, because I would love to know what happens next. Thanks for sharing it with us!

-dwelian
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OMG!! Hahah
Yay! Katara moment! lmao
I have to admit, the latter chapters are better. xD
But this chapter has to be my favorite.
It was so nicely done.
I loved it.
LMAO The whole clothes thing was funny. And then Katara healing Zuko was so cute. ><
Heheh Very awesome!

Hahah This chapter was fun :D
The fighting scene was nice
And the text at the end was kind of funny
I love it so far!
Off to read to last chapter!

Poor Zuko.
I hate his father. xD
But gah...I'm off to read more!!

Good chapter! It was a nice mix of drama, angst and humor. Good job.

(Once again with the laziness)

Ok, so the beginning started off a bit slow. Not plot wise, but grammatically / language wise. You mentioned how the throne grew hotter and larger twice. But after the beginning, it really began to pick up. The plot twists with his mother / father wishing to kill him were very good! And I can see where the story is going now. So all in all, good chapter.

(too lazy to log in. :P )

Very nice chapter, and I'm being serious! It flows nicely, though the change in scenes between Katara and Zuko threw me for a second for I hadn't realized they had switched. The plot is good, I don't know how original / common it is because I don't read fanfiction. The only thing that's iffy is when Princess Azula shows up. It's kind of just there. For language, it's not too complex, but not repetitive. You could use some more descriptions here and there, but it's fine how it is. At times, your sentence structure gets a bit choppy when in the longer paragraphs, but it doesn't take away from the story.

Aah Zutara...the blessed blessed pairing...hehe...nice start. But it somehow feels as though you're rushing things. That's just my opinion. It's good.

On I go to the next chapter!


krystalmage

Cute story. Good job of keeping the characters in character.

Sokka's stupidity is always good for comic relief, and you used it to great advantage. Zuko's pain over his father's cruelty fits well with what he suffered in the anime. Katara will have her hands full with those two if you ever decide to do a sequel.

Sorry about your notebook going missing! It's always a pain to have to rewrite from scratch

i love this so far! please update this soon!

wow!! really great stuff! i can't wait for the next chapter!!

great chapter, the emotions the tension just breathtaking, but i am asking you one thing it bin 4 moths since your last update ar you going on with this story, if yes it would be realy great.
I think youre not going on with this story because there are no reviews i think, if your going on i will review on every chapter till it is completed or you stop writing this story.

Nice except there isn't any Zutara.

Hi Jersey Girl *oops* Zuko Flame!
Can you guess who I am? ^_^

Very nice JerseyGirl! So. First Chapter. It wasn't OOC which I automatically assume all Zutara wil be. And this wasn't. So that was nice. Hopefully you can keep it that way. I have a few tips. There are these things called adjectives. And they really spice up a story, lemme tell you. You should try throwing a few more of those in. It was a little dull, the first chapter, but I'm sure it's going to get more fun so I'm going to keep reading. The only thing that really "bothered" me was the fact that the narrator kept asking questions. Something to the effect of "His father wouldn't really do that? He was Ozia's son after all, right? Why was Iroh so untrusting?" Over and Over. That ws REALLY distracting, so try to stear away from that next time.

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