that story is awesome plez continue! ^^

poor Yugi. i'm glad he's okay. Good chapter.

Hey Girl. You rock! This is way better then it was before! Keep it up! Also, I'm going to Bushgardens soon...so, I don't know how much I'll be able to review.

wow.. yugi was too careless.. hehe.. nice chap! though i'd like to see something happen to joey... hehe.. hope you'll update soon!

-flamescythe

not bad.. but i thought this story was angst? oh well.. guess i have to wait for the next chaps.. see you soon!

-flamescythe

aw! yami's in love! that sweet!

sounds good so far! keep it up and this story will be a hit!^_^

You say this story is edited?

Um...you have several spelling mistakes, plus script format is against the Terms of Service. You can't add them during a chapter, or write it as a story itself. I really suggest you head back to the drawing board there and fix those problems.

I like this a lot. Good first chapter.