Firstly, I haven't read this story recently enough to compare the original to this new one, but I can still review it as a stand-alone anyway.

You didn't need to "put it bluntly", Jameson, we would have gotten the point anyway.
You might not want any more input from Peter than "minimal", MJ, considering he's not known for his fashion sense.
Metal jacks in his *head*?!
Whoo... his ego matches that of dear Uncle Otto from Misadventured Overthrows. I can't help but agree with Osborn on this one.
"Little prick"? I'm pretty sure that people don't actually *call* each other that.
Nice job, MJ. You really CAN'T say stuff like that! I can hear the flush from everything going down the toilet already.

Overall: Nice chapter, fairly IC, a few dialogue problems, but you've heard that before. It was pretty well-written. Good job.

I liked the quote at the end . . .

Whoa, dude... Sad ending... One question, though - Is Doc Ock still alive?

A great fanfic. A sequel would be nice. I liked Mary Jane as Spiderwoman. You might want to create some female versions of the canon Spiderman's enemies or make up some of your own.

*Whimper* Oh no, Pete's dead...
Oh man, I'm gonna have a dark colud hanging over /my/ head for a while. *Kicks Fic!Otto too* And its so sad, how real this all is. I probably would've ended up pulling the exact same thing as MJ, giving up and brokenly curling up in a dark place, sobbing my eyes out.
Man, you're gonna BE something one day. Keep it up. The quotes are a nice touch.
RIP Pete.

Well, there's a tear jerker. Good thing I had my tear ducts removed! Good job. Sequel sounds like a good idea.

This was a great fanfic. I'm sorry you decided to end it. Maybe you'll do a sequel. My compliments to your writing skills.

She quit?!! No offense, but that seems very pathetic of her. Wouldn't she keep on fighting to protect others from ending the same way Peter did? She should use her powers to help others. I know that sounds cheesy, like it's a copy from the guy that wrote Spiderman, but hey, the guy wasn't far off his mark!

I'm betting that Peter escaped somehow. It would be pretty cool if Peter would become a little bit super-human somehow. Still needs more description, but this chapter was the best so far.

Oh snap.

You updated and I keep missing it!! XP sorry about that.

Yeah, I'm not mad about Otto, he kinda acts exactly like the comicverse one. People kept using Ultimate or Movieverse, its nice to see a change. I hope Peter's alright!

I'm perfectly aware that Otto's nuts in this one, but the whole... thing... just shocked me. And he STILL hints at shipping! (I think it's gross, but that's just me.) Overall: nope, still see no slipping in quality. I liked the little Otto? Pete crossword thing; it was cute. It didn't last, though. It was kinda predictable that he grabbed Pete, but, then again, I woulda wrote it the same way, so... But the end- OMG PETE! That... I wouldn't have predicted.

This was pretty interesting.

Good job! This is really good so far! Keep it up!
Also, I suggest bringing Green Goblin and Venom into the mix, but you seem to already know how it ends...

Good grief, this is better than I thought it would be. But you need more description. I didn't really catch what was going on during the fight between MJ and Octo. Describe smells, pain, what the interior of the hospital room looked like, you know? I'll be keeping tabs on this story, so you'll be hearing from me!