 asbiahr0w4yh 2006-07-25 . chapter 1Well, to be honest, it was a bit on the short side, but it was still very heart-warming and cute! I liked it a lot. I think that this kind of fic would work better as a multi-chap, though, personally, because it actually has a lot of potential to be more than one chapter. Also, your OC (Sarah) is very interesting...I want to know WHY she is broken and WHY she wants an IF at such an old age...that would make her character even more interesting. Please don't stop here because there's way more potential for this fic! *adds to alerts* |