Oh my God. I thought /I/ developed complex plotlines... but really, this is more than just intricate, it's amazing! It has all the makings of canon and it's like the perfect jigsaw puzzle - everything fits together in some way and there are awesome little serendipities and, just, guh! I LOVE how Lucy's shepherdess was a big-minor thing in this because that is one of my favorite moments in the books... one of those times when I had to stop reading, put down my book and be in awe/ really THINK about it.
I have a feeling you'll finish this. Call it intuition or wishful thinking, but I think you're committed enough. And I promise that, for what it's worth, when you finish it, be it in a year or twenty, I WILL go to Staples and buy a huge-** pile of nice printer paper and two ink cartridges and print out the entire masterpiece, whereupon I'll bind it in some fashion and place it on my bookcase as the eighth book.

... *blink*

That is one HELL of a plotline. Most of the time, I dislike or am ambivalent towards stories that take such a drastic turn, putting everyone in a totally different timeline, but... I like this. And I'm not the least bit fussed that 80% of the storyline was a summarised outline; in fact, such complex storylines sometimes go on for so long (however necessary that may be) that the delightful little spark is lost. Not so here; the interweaving makes a great deal of sense.

Also, I have to say; I love Semele. I don't know why, but in all your stories where she's mentioned, I really like her. Perhaps because she's a lover who is 'quiet', not taking over the plot, just there, and... likable.

In any case, thank you. Not just for the story but for giving us the plotline. But if I might ask - I don't suppose you'd like the idea of doing some one-shots from the later parts of your storyline? I mean, putting up more 'chapters' after this one that are just bits and pieces of the story you'll never write. I ask because, while I'm not greatly interested in seeing Lucy learn about the merpeople's history and the whole claiming sons thing (as you've already told us all about it), I would like to see the the island scene where they discover who they are, or a happy moment with Edmund and his wife, or Susan being a mother, or more with Ardeeb. And I figure that one-shots would be less work, particularly since you get to write the parts you like most.

Just an idea - no pressure. I I can imagine later scenes anyway (but I would never write them; I would never work with someone else's characters without losing my confidance), and I still liked every moment of this story. Thank you!

This truly is epic! I just found it today, started reading it, and then to my horror, I find that it's not even finished! Anyhow, I can understand how hard it would be; this story really does have the makings for one of those great, intricate fantasy novels with all of the information in the back of the book! Reading the "plotline" chapter, I'm really just amazed at how well thought out this whole thing was. And all because of Lucy and the mermaid. It was wonderful, really. I love how you really just take the Pevensies and base this world around them. It's fantastic. I think that this will be "canon" in my mind as to what happened in Narnia's history.

I'm so disappointed that you won't be continuing! Please let me know if someone takes this story up or if you can manage to update.

Oh, this is hard! I can't wait for the next chapter! It seems like I've been waiting forever and a day to read the last one because our internet is out and about...
So, spare us all... please!
I hope you'll come up with the idea soon... I know how it is, as it happens with stories I write. :P
Don't give up hope!
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God Bless the U.S.A.!

That was a great chapter! My heart nearly lept for excitement when Peter found the wooden dagger that was carved years ago...
I can't wait to read on...
Actually, I'm surprised at what you had the man say to Peter when he mocked him, it took me by surprise... and I wish not to see it again...
But, over all, this was a great chapter!
I hope Peter finds out who Gale was and what happended to him...
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God bless the U.S.A.!

M, fascinating!! This one really caught me - I suppose the boy is Edmund? I am eager to find out what happens next, but I know how busy life can be, so I'll look forward to an update when it comes! :oD

I really liked that chapter. When he first found Loki and his friends I was thinking to mysef 'not to be trusted' then after a while you managed to persuade me otherwise until i thought they were ok. Then when he was captured at the end it was more of a surprise. Nice work!

Oh! Very well done! Excellent start to Edmund's arch. I look forward to more. Please write more soon!

Okay, the boys are really not having much luck finding good places to stay. First Peter is a slave and now Ed!! Good grief, do they ever get a break? Excellent chapter, though!

Update? Darn. Update? Darn. Update? Darn.

Get the picture?

(Get the Family Guy reference?)

Moving on. This is an amazing story which must be really hard to write. My money is on this one is Susan. Woohoo.

You are doing a great job at this, keep at it!
I love how you get all the character's (i.e. Peter, Susan, Edmund, and Lucy) characteristics and parts just right.
I am new at this and still looking around, but you are under my favorite authors list. : )

Oh nice! I love it. It's an interesting look at the world of Narnia that we always take for granted because C.S. Lewis didn't write about it. Very well done. I hope you write Edmund's part soon!

Another good chapter! So Lucy lost her memories also, this should be interesting...

It's pretty difficult to find back into a story after long update delays... However, it's another good chapter; the timeline seems a bit blurred, but I guess you'll fix it sooner or later. Nice Hymn to Aslan. What you say about medieval warfare is certainly true, even if Hollywood pretends otherwise. But - in my book at least - the twins are Cor and Corin.