yesterday might, I couldn't stop reading. It went on and on until three in the morning and I was so tired I couldn't write a review worth anything. So I went to bed... after making sure I made this story a favorite of mine. (So I wouldn't ever lose it ^^)

Now... Now is different because I can't seem to find the right words. What could I really say?

If I couldn't stop reading it was simply because I had never found a time travel story so 'p e r f e c t'. Each adventure fitting (and I don't know if it's written like that.. = going so well with) so well with every change made by going back in the past.

Their love being stronger than the dark side, and being blessed by the force (as I understand it) was a thing rarely exploited with such a end. Normally... love still don't do what your fanfic has. I loved that it ended happily. But I loved so much more that it was done with as much care as you put in it. It was your writing that made the difference. Your words and your way of making the time travel ... not normal but fitting.

It seemed as I was reading one of the star wars books. It was like a side story of the serie... a possibility. It was an adventure I would have missed had I not read it. And even as fan of the movies I didn't try this fandom before more than once or twice... Because the originals seemed so perfect too. But... you made it so I came to love this fanfom in fanfiction, for all the possibility, but more for the possibility of finding other writters like you. If there is more like you... with more fanfiction like yours. Then I will be happy reading all I can.

But your story will stay the one that changed my mind for good, and not my ongoing tries with one or two fanfic of this fandom. But now I thing I might be reading star wars as much as I read Harry Potter and Buffy (wich is very much ^^)

Thank you for writing this jewel, and please write more? ^^ (I had to ask lol)

"The shadow had been removed and everything would be all right."

These words conclude what is without a dobut the single best completed work I have read on the internet. brillantly done, an example of taking a good basic premise and working it to the conclusion.

Some might wonder how the would be emperor could have held up so long in a fight, others would wonder how he managed to hold them off that long, but both can draw solice from the fact that it is a logical climax to the action. The emotional resoluion of the falling action is executed flawlessly.

As much as seeing a little bit of the Jedi on their vaction temps me, I am more eager to see you tackle another project.

Hoo boy…
VERY impressive bit of work, to say the least!
The concept alone was highly interesting- time travel and all related concepts often seems to be the one part of science fiction stories that the “Star Wars” has NEVER done in ‘reality’, so it was good to see a story using that theme to its fullest extent-, but what else you got up to in the plot DEFINITELY earned you points.
I wasn’t ENTIRELY certain about a couple of parts in the story- some of Anakin’s sentences in particular didn’t sound quite right; I just couldn’t QUITE see a nine-year-old boy protesting that he was ‘good’ the way you phrased it here-, but since that’s more a matter of personal opinion I focused more on the overall plot, which was excellent.
The bond you had develop between Obi-Wan and Anakin worked out superbly well, perfectly demonstrating Obi-Wan’s efforts to improve his old relationship with Anakin by starting afresh with a greater willingness to appreciate how hard the current transition must be for his would-be apprentice, progressing to the point where Obi-Wan was finally able to conclusively reveal to Anakin that he DOES care about him, no matter what he became in the future or what problems they had during their time together in the original timeline.
And as for the final duel between Obi-Wan and Palpatine…
DAMN, that was dramatic; his defeat of Maul was expertly done without appearing TOO easy- even with thirteen years’ extra experience on Obi-Wan’s side Maul’s still not going to go down that quickly-, and the subsequent duel with Palpatine perfectly reflected Obi-Wan’s improved skill and the scale of Darth Sidious’s power; even when caught off-guard to THIS extent, that guy still wouldn’t go down easily.
And as for Obi-Wan’s last vision…
Simple, but highly moving; it’s good to know that, after everything that happened, he managed to achieve his goal of a peaceful future with the end of the Sith.
Keep up the great work!

This was a truly excellent story to read. Thanks for sharing it. -Shi

So good!
Love how adorable Obi-Wan and Anakin are!

Fantastic story!

Beautifully written. I couldn't stop smiling and laughing, except for the times when I nearly cried. Have you considered writing as a career? I think you'd do well.

Oh, how I enjoy happy endings!

Chapter 12
“There’s not much to tell. Yet another straight-forward mission goes awry, forcing us to flee for our lives, and stranding us on a desert planet. Once again we’re lucky to be here.”
[Points +1]

-Master, just think at all the pathetic creatures we could save, now that the both of us seem to have developed a knack for attracting them,-
[Points +1]

into a general gaze of swearing
[haze?]

-Please hold me to this oath, Master: I, Obi-Wan Kenobi, do here by solemnly swear that from this day forth, I shall clean my room properly, or may the Force take me where I stand.-
-You broke something, didn’t you.-
[Interrogative missing its question mark, but still funny]

Qui-Gon finally decided it wasn’t impossible for his apprentice to have noticed, considering the amount of times it had happened.
[Ah, being eyerolled by authority. It’s one of we little people’s rare joys]

“Oh, really?” Obi-Wan asked, and Qui-Gon could sense his smile. “Whom do you speak of, Master? All the not-quite-thirteen year olds I know have perfect temperaments.”
[Points +1]

doubted his ability to recognize a Dark Sider when he met one? Even after all that had happened to him with his second apprentice?
[What happened?]

“The one who is said to bring balance to the Force.”
But what kind? How do you define ‘balance’?
[I’d long said this since watching Episode 1 and George Lucas never satisfactorily tackled that question]

Chapter 13
echoing through the otherwise empty indoor poolroom,
[With as large a capacity as the Jedi Temple was implied to have, wouldn’t there be at least a few others?]

Wouldn’t height be good for scaring them?”
“And it certainly lets me get through crowds easily.”
“And it would be really nice if you had to reach something that was way up high.”
“Oh, all right, fine!” Obi-Wan exclaimed,
[Points +2]

stew over ever defeat
[every]

Before anyone could react, Obi-Wan splashed
[This reminds me of a cartoon where a father mentioned ‘that’s okay, son, these things take time…and your time is up *splash*’]

“Keep firing, general!” Anakin shouted to Qui-Gon. “I don’t care if I’m in the crossfire; teach this evil mastermind a lesson he won’t forget!”
[I wouldn’t have expected to hear a line like this in a splashing war at the jedi pool, but it’s extremely funny nonetheless]

any expression chiseled out of his face
[No expression? A strange expression?]

Chapter 14
He waited a while, letting the tea steep properly,
[Nice detail]

What terrors could Obi-Wan have seen to give him eyes that were too old for his body?
[Strange how one brief event can so change a person…and that much more a plethora of small events stacking on top of each other]

Obi-Wan had always been one of the brightest beacons of Light he’d ever met, radiating a warmth that drew people, and trouble, to him
[Though you had Padame describe him as slightly cold and distant to her as a stranger. Which is it?]

and he raced past Qui-Gon,
[The ‘outside Qui-Gon’, I think that you could’ve made a distinction]

Here was the Obi-Wan that Qui-Gon remembered, the one who was coolly polite to strangers and chastised him about the Code.
[This sounds more like the early impressions of Obi-Wan that Padame was mentioning, the one who loosened up to be the ‘beacon of light’ hadn’t yet formed I don’t think. At least, he hadn’t matured enough to rise to the surface]

and he crushed the lifeless body to his, his mind shrieking with a litany of denials.
[Strangely subdued and entirely appropriate]

Chapter 15
as his ears had popped the same way they had when he had taken off from Tatooine.
[Popping only occurs as a pressure change when you’re in an open system (air can get in or out), so while it makes sense with the elevators in the Jedi Temple it doesn’t quite for the ship taking off from Tatooine – that was a sealed, self-contained space ship. He’d feel momentum but not a pressure change because the ship’s atmosphere would be steady circulation instead of bleeding off air into Tatooine’s stratosphere]

He’d immerged a little
[emerged]

to get painful Plus
[Missing period after ‘painful’, comma after ‘Plus’]

one of his earlier ones where he’d tried to ram Sebulba off the track with a particularly nasty flash of anger-
[Would Anakin’s pods ever be big enough to hope to do this?]

Chapter 16
Other than that, your uses are few and far between.”
“I love you too, Master,” Obi-Wan drawled.
[You catch the dynamic so well]

Sitting on the Council had been meaningless, in a way.
[He may have surpassed many of them, but despite being a Master I don’t believe that Obi-Wan was ever one of the Council itself. At least, that wasn’t my interpretation of 2&3]

Chapter 17
what in the world had happened to quiet, respectful Padawan Kenobi.
[Hayden Chistensen?]

-Is there anything else you’d like me to ask?-
[Trying to get Obi-Wan to have his head checked?]

-The kind who know that nothing their Master can dish out will be worse that something they’ve already experienced,- Obi-Wan replied, and though his mental tone had a teasing lilt to it, Qui-Gon felt a small shiver of utter truth to his words.
[Another good, subtly put yet dark shadow yet to be dealt with by Obi-Wan]

and I since it’s my
[Extraneous ‘I’]

Chapter 18
This chapter also contains the AU ending to the Obi-Wan/Anakin duel,
[ Good, that’s one thing that you haven’t yet very clearly indicated: at what point did Vader defeat Obi-Wan?]

Demolished weaponry jutted from the earth like broken bone, wires still sparking and lights still flickering.
[Dark, yet I feel true to SW3]

the one with a heart large enough to help absolute strangers, was destined to annihilate the Jedi, to kill his own family?
[The biggest hearts can be capable of the most terrible destruction when they’re trampled on and broken]

and came to care about you quite a bit!
[The ‘quite a bit’ seems to weaken the sentence’]

He basked in the anguish he felt, letting it flow over him and fill him up with power, and he was angered when the Force calmed at last.
[This makes me wonder if there are any divergence fics on Obi-Wan turning. He’d certainly have had ample opportunity]

Chapter 19
If you die now, I swear to the heavens above I will follow you all the way into the underworld of the Force and I will kill you!”
[Points +1]

which gave him the strength to strike down an opponent with more power and skill,
[That always seemed like rage to me]

Chapter 20
I need to meet with Mace and Master Yoda and discuss a plan of action,
[I’m sure one Master is as good as another, but why’s it always Windu and Yoda?]

Chapter 21
the things he’d consumed before someone could stop him (boxes, for one; he seemed to have forgotten how to open them to get the food inside)
[Odd, yet funny]

The chain that connected him to the wall was apparently only one link long,
[So something more like a stiff bar connecting him to the wall?]

he could handle interrogation.
[Is he this stupid? Proper interrogation will break _any_one, it’s just a matter of time]

“I hope you find your accommodations comfortable?”
“Absolutely first rate. Tell me; who does your interior design work? The Temple could use a few good cells like this.”
[Points +1]

Was his charade really working?
[Given that Palpatine was implied to be an equal to Yoda in SW3, I doubt it. He’d have to sense that there’s some faking, though he might not know precisely what truly lurks behind the deepest shields and therefore could be playing along]

room as big as the training salle in the Temple,
[

Chapter 22
Whoever said that power was the headiest drug certainly had it right. It helped that the chairs were much more comfortable than any of the others in the Temple.
[Points +1]

Mace took up the pacing vigil,
[Points +1]

of the Master’s own communicators.
[Masters’]

was easily only a meter and
[I don’t think ‘easily’ fits with ‘only’]

Chapter 23
He molded the Force into a kind of rod that spanned the walls, forming a gymnastic bar of sorts, and he gripped it tightly, tensing in preparation.
[I know he might be able to wedge himself into the corner, but I think that creating a rafter to hang from seems too much to me]

air speeders formed a solid perimeter around the entire area,
[I might say a simple perimeter instead of ‘solid’]

courts do not accept Force-based evidence lightly
[They accept it at all?]

Obi-Wan sped their descent just enough to avoid the deadly bolts,
[Given the way Force lightning spreads, I’d think it would still hit at least a little]

its soothing calm pulsing through his veins.
[Given how you described repeatedly that Palaptine was setting the Force around him into a swirling storm of sorts, shouldn’t Obi-Wan be buffeted here?]

and a red blade shot from one end of the lightsaber.
[Into him. Whoops. Ryan vs Dorkman strikes again]

Chapter 24
–The other Masters aren’t sure of how to proceed, so they’re just standing on the sidelines.-
[I’m afraid that doesn’t make a lot of sense: even with the shock of Obi-Wan ‘becoming’ a master and the sith revealed, shouldn’t they at least retain the sense to move forward and provide some backup? You already described Mace attacking, though only once. Your earlier narrative should’ve indicated that they should know they can’t afford to hang back]

Chapter 26
some of the other Master’s faces.
[masters’, I think]

I think the ending was a little too light and ‘fluffed’ – having Anakin a happy jedi would’ve been good enough (and even if the Order changed, wouldn’t marriage still be banned?) I also expected more from the fight against Sidious, but that came across well enough. The story as a whole was excellently done and considering the altered histories everybody acted sensibly and in-character. You and your editors did a great job, even as long as this was I found it virtually without flaws.

it’s all property of the Great Bearded One.
[Alec Guiness?]

why Anakin turned in the first place, and kept coming up with the same conclusion,
[My interpretation was that he was, primarily, immature and had too much thrown at him. You?]

Chapter 2
as a strange snap-hiss! echoed
[Simple, concise description of the lightsaber ignition]

“You bumped into me in your haste to get onboard,”
[What, is Obi-Wan deaf to the battle outside? I don’t see how he could be, everybody seemed to be bustling when they lifted off]

Don’t Jedi have them all the time?
[That would be annoying]

could do to stop
[do _nothing_]

Chapter 3
as he’d spent a good deal of his training frustrated with everything.
[Yes, I’d imagine Anakin would]

Whatever it was, it certainly wasn’t real.
[I’ve seen a lot of ‘the character goes back’ and this is quite possibly the first one that has a realistic, plausible reaction]

toss him off that catwalk?
[tossed]

Chapter 4
“Crazy?”
“I was going to say hysterical.”
“Isn’t that pretty much the same thing?”
[Nearly]

so he’d wait until his padawan decided to come out of meditation.
Then he’d start asking until everything began to make sense.
[Characteristic and well portrayed]

Chapter 5
A loud snore interrupted his thoughts, shattering the silence and making Obi-Wan groan.
[Wait, wasn’t it Qui-Gon that was saying Obi-Wan would snore all the time? I wouldn’t think ‘revenge’ would be quite so consistent]

Now, he knew the Code backwards and forwards and knew that a Jedi must never take revenge, so he mentally renamed it, calling it ‘His Plan to Teach Master Qui-Gon a True Lesson’
[Points +1]

He’d certainly paid for it, however, because he hadn’t found a way to reverse it. That was until he’d been knighted, and given access to texts that had previously been forbidden.
[Oh, I see]

Had the Force sent him back so that he could fix his mistakes, or repeat them in a completely different fashion?
[Logical line of thought - neither wholly negative or positive]

this was all some elaborate hoax,
[wasn’t]

So stop arguing with yourself and start thinking.
[Or stop thinking and do something, as he’s been doing the opposite all day]

“They’d be too afraid of you throwing them into walls or something.”
[Only in The Force Unleashed]

about you, when he
[Extraneous comma]

every part of him waiting on tenterhooks.
[ A very graphic but I suppose effective metaphor]

instead of some stony teacher,
[Or a brother, because brothers often keep each other at arm’s length, and while they’ll rely on each other they also keep secrets from each other]

His Anakin had never tried to console him,
[He had, he just was very poor about doing so. The movies made it clear that they’d become very good at keeping each other at arm’s length, and you’re doing a good job of exploring that]

Chapter 6
Stars and galaxies, what happened?
[Interesting curse of sorts]

He continued examining, and he jerked mentally when it skillfully diverted him. If he hadn’t known better, he would’ve sworn that there was nothing there, but the nature of the redirection was what gave him his clues. Without his knowledge, someone had erected a Kinas-shield around Obi-Wan.
[I’m not sure what ‘Kinas’ is (must look that up), but your metaphorical descriptions are very well done]

but Qui-Gon had, in all probability, placed a high-level shield on Obi-Wan and didn’t remember doing it.
[Given your descriptions of it, wouldn’t this have been something passively attached to Obi-Wan on his return and therefore noticed at least to an extent by Qui-Gon?]

This time, however, he began searching for any residue of Obi-Wan’s presence. He smiled when he found traces of his missing apprentice, a flash of humor here, a brush of sorrow there.
[I like how you’re using these emotional terms in senses like physical tracking]

The next thing Qui-Gon knew he was face down on the floor, his cheek mashed against the cushion, his arms twisted behind his back, and a deactivated lightsaber held to his throat.
[This is dramatically tense sure, but I’d think this level of reflexive action and paranoia would only have occurred to an Obi-Wan that had been running from Vader for many years. The Obi-Wan that went back may have become more skilled than most, but I wouldn’t think he’d have picked up all of these things. I guess I’m referring more to the shielding, but this section (if explained below) was shorter to quote]

He wasn’t sure how he would’ve responded, if placed in the same position, and part of him selfishly hoped that he would never be.
[There’s something funny about that because I’m sure there’s a good many fanfics that have Qui-Gon go back when he dies]

Chapter 7
some of the pale orange protein dish. Qui-Gon assumed that it had been engineered to imitate Naboo scrambled eggs, which were perishable and hard to come by.
[The unpleasant and artificial description of that reminds me of powdered eggs, except not as disgusting]

“What is all this stuff, anyway?”
“It’s better not to ask that,”
[Truly the food of gallies world ‘round]

“Don’t listen to Obi-Wan, Ani. He just wants you to give up on your food so he doesn’t have to go back for seconds.”
Qui-Gon gave a small shrug as he reached for the seasoning and the Corellian catsup. “Minor details, padawan. You still managed to throw up all over the Teersian ambassador, ruining his best set of robes. How I salvaged that situation is a mystery none will solve.”
[You’ve given Qui-Gon a lot of funny lines]

“In this day and age there is little desire for truth.”
“And more desire for higher circulation,”
[Times don’t change much, do they? Things have been that way for centuries up to now, and while it could’ve been much more ham-fisted you put it forth in a pleasantly subtle way]

-It’s kind of funny, actually,- the young man responded. –She thinks she has us completely fooled.-
[It’s amusing to read the different sides. Some people interpret her as having everybody else fooled, others (like you here) have it the other way around]

“But you’ve got no proof, do you?”
[ Is this in the same sense as the earlier accusation about SNORING intentionally, or am I just reading it that way?]

Chapter 8
He’d never expected Obi-Wan to know so much about machines,
[I wonder how much of that is due to the hears between]

but he never got upset or seemed frustrated.
[That’ll change]

Anakin nodded, trying to visualize everything. Padmé and Obi-Wan waved at him from their place in the Senate, he saw Qui-Gon buried under datapads that had come from them, and Jar Jar ran around trying his hardest to get people to obey the laws that Qui-Gon had decided upon.
He didn’t seem to be doing a very good job, though…
[Extremely amusing foreshadow to Episode 2]

It was the look that told of a deep wound of loss, which appeared only when the pain grew too strong to be contained.
[I think the comma is unnecessary, yet otherwise well portrayed]

“T-Test me?” he whispered, freezing in sudden fear. “What does that mean?”
[Math quiz]

Chapter 9
–I raise you for twelve long years, and this is the kind of respect I get?-
-Only what you deserve, dear Master mine,-
[Points +1]

–Nothing, Master. I was simply thinking about your warnings and reflecting on my actions.-
-Of course you were,- Qui-Gon sent back, sarcasm dripping from the words,
[Points +1]

I won’t let you have him, Sith,
[Does he ‘transmit’ this, or is it just an internal thought?]

the most powerful Dark force I’ve ever sensed,
[Not much for comparison there, with the Sith being thought to have died out]

visions, wasn’t he.-
[Interrogative missing its question mark]

Chapter 10
They just didn’t make couches properly; surely the designers knew that the couch was going to be bounced on.
[Points +1]

The apartment overall was small, with a common area, a small kitchen, a ’fresher unit, and two bedrooms
[That sounds pretty luxurious to me, those are facilities that most people on earth don’t have. It may sound like a small apartment, but think about this: billions of people have no bathroom (as most in the “1st world” would think), and millions have no kitchen]

Qui-Gon said, stepping up beside Obi-Wan, who slid into the background.
[Good save, and subtle yet complex movement here]

Qui-Gon had given up trying to get him to clean it every day, instead settling for once a week, with the promise that the mess never encroached upon any other area.
[I’ve known people like that]

every time a Knight or a Master received some kind of thank-you present from a grateful society and was forced to turn it over to the Order, the object was surreptitiously sold to generate the credits that went into those monthly allowances.
[Makes sense, and without being part of the ‘materialistic world’ is the only way I can think of to still remain market-capable]

“Wizard,” Anakin whispered
[I’ve seen this used more ambiguously elsewhere, but I have to say that I never saw him using this in the prequels and it doesn’t grammatically fit how it’s being used as a blanket exclamation]

Initiates, who were waiting
[Unnecessary comma]

away, helet go of
[he let]

Chapter 11
and it did have Bantha meat
[but?]

That was amazing! I loved it!! :)

My stupid internet wasn't working earlier, but now it is. Since it seems to be cooperating now I had to come back and leave a review. I love Shadows of the Future! This is about the third or fourth time I've read it and I still enjoy every minute of reading. THank you so much for sharing your work!
"When life hands you lemons, make grape juice. Then sit back and let the world wonder how you did it." -Raven

This was one of the best SW stories I have read. I include Pro Fic in that statement. You had my attention and interest from the very beginning till the very end. Spellbinding. I also thoroughly enjoyed your trailer for this story. Wonderfully done. Thank you so much for sharing both with us!

I bloody Love this story! I could not stop reading it :D I am very impressed; it is By far One of the Best Fan Fics I have ever read :D Nice work!!

BRAVA BRAVA BRAVISIMA. This was an amazing fic in which I truly empathized with Obi, something I rarely do. My compliments to the author. :D