 Mantineus 2007-01-08 . chapter 7Interesting chapter. |
 Gooey 2007-01-05 . chapter 2Okay, great story, buut a bit of advice:
Stop trying to use 'he' every sentence like you did in this part:
His feet were off the ground, he was flying.
He flew higher until Hobbes was just an ant in the front yard.
He went down to the ground.
He couldn't believe it, he was a superhero.
He rose higher, until he met ith a plane and started waving to the passengers in there.
It gets boring and repeditive, and some readers won't even bother reviewing.
Just work on this, and you're bound to have a great story! |
 MegaBen 2006-12-30 . chapter 7Nice story but why couldn't you think up a more original villain than this "Mex Muthor" guy? He's just a Lex Luthor clone!
Oh well, continue anyway. |
 Mantineus 2006-09-16 . chapter 6Great story! Please update soon! |
 HobbesLuigi82 2006-08-02 . chapter 5Something tells me this is going to be an awesome story! Follow ComicFreak1007's advice; and you'll be fine! Keep it up! UPDATE SOON! |
 Charles Lamont 2006-07-31 . chapter 4This is good. But, Yea, the chapters need to be longer. |
 Comicfreak1007 2006-07-21 . chapter 3The story's good so far. Keep it up.
I wonder what's going to happen next. |
 Comicfreak1007 2006-07-20 . chapter 1Good job on this chapter. Let me give you advice:
Your chapters could be a little longer. For a chapter to be long, it has to be 600 words or more.
Also, you need to post stories one at a time. Like, once your story is finish, post another one.
Also in a story, wait for a couple of days before uploading another chapter instead of uploading all of the chapters in one day. Trust me, you'll get more reviews that way.
Other than that, good job. I'm sure you'll become a great writer. |