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| BerriVsmile 2007-07-02 ch 10,  | abusethis is really cool! i like it, so write more soon, k? |
| Poaetpainter 2007-06-15 ch 11, | abuseJust realized I've never commented before... Thought I'd say you've got an awesome story. Can't wait till the next chapter! |
| mallratrebel 2007-05-19 ch 10, | abuseI LOVE IT. UPDATE NOW |
| Blueshadows2010 2006-11-13 ch 4, | abuseOkay first off let me tell you that I have never read a Witch fanfic before and congrats yours is the first one! Anyhow I just started reading it as I already told you and I think this story is very good, I like it a lot and I hope you can update very soon, cause most of the stories I read the authors haven't updated in about 5 months and taht makes me mad even though I'm still happy when they update and I don't flame them so you don't have to worry about me flaming you. Anyhow getting to the point I love your story and hope you update soon! ~Jessica~ |
| GreatMarta 2006-08-26 ch 3, | abuseOkay, I have to say it's nothing so impressing so far,and doesn't smell a more complicated plot, but maybe it's better. You say everything straight and simple, and don't risk experimants. What I like, is surely that you gave the WITCH sons, not only daughters, they are not the same age and the kids' names doesn't form any words like HEART or POWER. The idea with parting the heart into two is a bit extraordinary. Perhaps it would be better if the WITCH didn't need the heart anymore and were able to change on their own, and would simply pass the heart to their kids. Anyway, the story is overall not bad. I do believe you have a few surprisen upon your sleeves, and wish you luck. |
| Veronica Valentine 2006-08-15 ch 2, | abuseok when are you going to finish it |
| Airhead93 2006-08-10 ch 2, | abusePlease update soon! Its a good story! Please update! Ill give you a cookie!=) |
| GreatMarta 2006-08-10 ch 2, | abuseHmh... pretty good. Especially Irma: that's so true ^_^. And Cornelia's kids fighting for the bathroom, I can almost see that happen ^_^. You're dpoing quite fine for a Next Generation story (I'm thinking about writting one myself, but doesn't have the plans done yet). BTW, I forgot to point it out: Lin is Hay Lin's family name, so now she and her daughter would be Hay Lyndon and Yan Lyndon, unless their friends choose to call them by Lin through habbit. Oh, and one question: How old are kids? |
| GreatMarta 2006-08-02 ch 1, | abuseGood for a prologue. We know who is whom = the basics. But we'll see how would you line the action up. |
| Sangs Bleus 2006-07-25 ch 1, | abuseJust to let you know. To be the knew gaurdians you have to skip generations. |
| winx-girl22 2006-07-22 ch 1, | abuselike the chaper it predictiple but still very good! question:how is jonhson going to be a gardian since he's a boy and the others are girls? |
| Rufus9832 2006-07-22 ch 1, | abuseLOve it! Review People Review! |
| Sokai 2006-07-21 ch 1, | abuseWell, more specifically, Terra means "From the Earth," but yeah. I highly doubt you put much stock into the names you'd chosen for each child, so that doesn't rightly matter that you'd named one of Taranee's kids an "earth-y" name instead of Cornelia's. Besides, the kid's born ON Earth, so it still fits. LoL Anyway, not happy that Nigel is just a simple gym teacher of all occupations, but otherwise, good start. ^_^ |
| WWMTgirl 2006-07-21 ch 1, | abusewait, wait, wait. Terra means EARTH. |