This is a great story. The chapter with Nick was the best by far. I have read a few my family fanfictions but this is the first one that made me laugh! :)

Hehe, that was very funny xD I really hope you update this as it is such a good story :)

LOL That was a classic scene with Michael and Ben. Well done with this :)

Haha, this is very, very funny xD LOL I can just imagine Michael and Ben camping and everything going wrong lol

Hehe, I really enjoyed reading this chapter xD I feel sorry for Abi and the ending was just classic lol :)

LOL Ben really backs out on things! xD Great job with this!

Haha, you got Susan and Ben bang on then lol

Susan walks through to the lounge, “Have you seen your father Michael?”

“Yes, he said to tell you that he’d gone to adopt an orphan.” Michael smirked.

*snort*

Oh, you have these characters down pat. I think I love you. This story is awesome :D:D

First off...let me just say frig YES- someone is actually writing 'my family' fanfiction!

Secondly-

You're writing is funny, in canon, but reads rather like a script, not an actual story. Maybe you could try interspersing the dialogue with a bit more descriptive bits, actions, movement around the scene, that sort of thing. It makes it easier to follow by slowing the plot down. The back and forth dialogue gets a little confusing without some flow. I know, I spent years doing the same thing

Fanatstic! Very drôle. Please update!