His lost innocence? eh? -blinks in confusion-

Sweet! that there was so deep, a bit briefer that I thought, but still to the point =)

The flow of this was very good for the first to sections but went crazy on the third and never looked back for the rest. On a side note, I personally went 'Ugh,' on:

"The evil appeared
His last barrier
Either his glory
Or a dead warrior"

Also, some of the sections really didn't seem to have any real reason of being there except to make it longer. I mean, you said it was about Link's lost innocence, but to me it was more about the whole story itself. In short... the focus was lost.

So... yeah. ^-^'

Nice.
The rhythm is great, as is the rhyme scheme. It manages to be both rhyming and serious at the same time; I wish I could do that.

Although the ending was very effective, I felt the rest of poem wasn't quite as... I dunno, emotionally satisfying? I dunno, it seemed to rely on summary too much, instead of the actual loss of innocence part.

Well, actually, if you reordered some of the stanzas a bit, I think it would be better, like the second one could come after "His sister he saved...etc." Also, the last stanza came a bit... suddenly. It's good, and ties it well to the beginning, but it's still pretty sudden.

Overall it's great, and I like this a lot. =]

Well, I must say its better than the Dark Link poem. You did better on the flow and alost the rhyming. The main problem I can still see is it still feels choppy. Poem's shouldn't be the same thing over and over again, the paragraphs shouldn't be the same thing over and over again. You should try and vary them a little more, like make the first and third paragraphs similar, but add a paragraph in between which is a bit different. Its hard to explain, poetry is something you have to learn through experience. For me I've realized that most poetry is done when you are feeling emotional. Like my poem "Like a Knife in my Heart" was written after I read a similar story and got all emotional so I just sat down and wrote a poem.

That...was too beautiful for words to explain! It kind of makes you think how much stress our body and minds could handle before we can reach out breaking point.

Ha! I told you I'd review, Lefty!

Anyways... Ahem... time to get constructive. -puts on hardhat-

I love how this poem covers most of Wind Waker's story; an epic tale told in a few, epic verses.

That, and the rhymes are awesome!

Just a few things caught my attention. In the seventh line, "monster's" should probably not be possesive. An easy mistake to make, (I should know. I do it ALL the time... well, a good portion of the time, anyway.)

Hm... and I'm not poet, but the line "Monsters put to bed" seems a little awkward. I'm getting a really strange mental picture of Link tucking undead moblins into bed... O.o

And you didn't even MENTION Tingle!

You must not have been bored enough that day. XD

See ya 'round, Lefty!

It's very good, though the last lines seem a bit out of place because it's the same word on the end. It's still very good! Kudos to you! And just for you... -DIES-