Omg! I love this! It's really well written and you can tell it was really planned out too! This is seriously my favorite pirate fanfic! Why did you stop writing it? I want to read another chapter! I knew I shouldn't have gone to the back of the list... Plz write more!

yes! Oh I loved it! My favorite chapter so far! I love this interaction between Lou and Jack, in the end! Awesomeness! lol And Im no liking this Jason guy at all. Not one bit! lol Im back in Florida, and although I loved California, its good to be back. Now I can review alot quicker and more frequently! Disney Land was fantasmic! I rode Pirates...twice! and All the lines were 15 minutes! They were so short! lol I got Jack's Dragon ring in the Pirate store and I love it! ok well back to the actual review...I love how you put the flashbacks between the knocks, that was briliant. It hard to picture Lou as that sweet little girl when you've seen what she can do. Fantastic! I cant wait untill you update! love you!

aww you almost made me cry when he bartered her. :'(

it reminded of my of memoirs of a geisha.

but yes v good. :)

i like you descriptions of people, places and other things, like 'scratchy almost as if it hadn’t been used in a long time.'

i dunno, that just stood out to me.

keep it up. :D

xo.

That was fantastic! I loved how Lou just killed that guy, without blinking. Such a change from the begining of the story! I cant believe how long your chapters are without that much speech. I mean there much be a couple of sentences of people actually speeking, but there is a whole entire world inside your descriptions! Its absolutly fantastic! lol well Update soon! I cant wait to read more! Love Ya!

p.s. Tomorow, the 23rd, im going to Disney Land! Im so excited! lol

cool story. :)

i liked how you showed jack's bad side (even if he's kinda scary sometimes) unlike lots of other stories where he's all sunshine and daisies. It's more of a true reflection of his personality, he's a pirate after all! lol.

keep it up!

xo.

Hector! lol I love Barbossa! Great chapter! Now were getting in deeper! You can never trust a pirate! I cant wait untill you update! Im going to California on Wendsday so It might take me longer to review, but I will, none the less! Ta, love!

Great Story, but I was kind of confused. There was a reference to Red Haired Shanks in this chapter and Mack (complete with straw hat and dreams of being pirate king)seems very similar to Straw Hat Luffy. Is this some kind of OP and POTC crossover? Anyway it was very well Job!

Jack...scared..me a little in this chapter. I dont like it when he gets angry! lol I loved this chapter! Now the real 'Lou Rivera' is comming out, finally! I cant wait to read more! Update soon!

Bravo! Stupenda! Great chapter! I must say, you have a way with words! Your story is like a song, it flows so perfectly! I cant wait till you update!

Wow this story is utterly fantastic! Im mesmorized! You are a fantastic writer! Im am sucked into your story and Im hoping you will update soon! Again, Fantastic story!

I. LOVE. THIS. STORY. You know how you can go through like, 15 pages of fanfiction stories and find maybe 2 that are worth actually reading and getting into? Well, this is one of those stories. You have a fantastic writing ability, you had me hooked when I started reading, and that's a difficult thing to do, believe me. I get bored with fanfictions really easily. ;) I'm really interested in this one though... The only critisicms I have are that... Why did you use a pop song from today back then? I mean the rest of your story is in that time period, everything is, I don't think it's wise to put in a 2005/6 song... Also making reference to Maria Carey, same idea. But that's just me. Other than that this is GREAT.

She's the captain who disappeared, isn't she? Huh huh huh? It would explain all the little hints and why her name seems similar to the captain's.

I like how the characters in this chapter, Steven and all the girls, kind of seem complicated. Except for Esmerelda, anyway. Like, the way that they're a family yet they still have issues, like Esmerelda and Vera, and the different sides of Steven. I really like that.

I wrote a POTC fanfiction like three years ago... It was stupid and I'm in the process of rewriting it because it sucks - lol - just so if you happen to come across it please don't think that's how I write today. D

I think I'm done with my uberly-long review now... Mhm... Till next time.

-Alex

awesome chapter! omg how do you do it! MORE

I really like your style, and I think it's a good story. The only thing I didn't like was your song you picked, just because I hate that song. No offense, my sis loves the song, and she plays it all the time *grumbles* TURN IT OFF! Back to the subject: I really love this story, and I hope you continue it!

-Equus