 kyasurinhiwatari 2008-09-14 . chapter 5wow, u hate mary-sues! haha, that was great. u had a great idea when u wrote this, lol!
ttfn,
kya |
 DemonicSymphony 2007-01-08 . chapter 5Cute |
 Fili 2006-09-19 . chapter 5I tried to leave a review of this chapter earlier, but the internet froze and wouldn't do anything. We have pretty poor sevice. But it's woking now, so I'm back. What I was going to say earlier was:
I caught the Star Wars, but not the other two. I've never seen Charlie and the Chocolate Factory. I guess it just sucks to be me. (thats what my brother says about things like that)
And writing a Sue fic looks like fun. Maybe I'll do it. Maybe.
And something I'll add now: Your point about all Sues having a weakness somewhere is a good one. I'll keep a close eye on the Sue and Stue stories I'm reading, to watch for weaknesses! You opened my eyes to a whole nother aspect to Sues. :)
Later!
Fili :) |
 Fili 2006-09-19 . chapter 4Hah! They're all dead! Those were funny, especially the Death-By-Stomping. Hey, It's not a good idea to have something for a pet that is so tall it can't see you! :)
Fili |
 Fili 2006-09-19 . chapter 3Well, guess I missed. Bleah. Oh well. But I did notice something else: all the Sues have...amalgrams? is that the word? of the letters V R A E N. I'm so proud of myself. Haha. Anyways...
I didn't notice anything about Avren, she seems quite normal, actually. So I draw a blank on this one. I'm going to go see what it is I missed.
Fili |
 Fili 2006-09-19 . chapter 2Ah! Poor, poor Darth Vader!! That poor man! That Sue had better die! Darth Vader doesn't act like that!
Umm, a weakness. Let me see. She's vain. That's one. I didn't see any mention of fighting skills. Two? That should be enough to do her in. If you or Darth Vader don't kill her, I will.
I'm off again, gotta see if I guessed right about her weakness.
Fili |
 Fili 2006-09-19 . chapter 1Hello, I'm back!
Oh, yuck! I've never seen this kind of Sue before. It is so stupid. Very, very Sue-ish. And since this is a Sue-Story, that's a good thing! I think. (Funny side note: I have a pony named Raven)
Well, this chapter doesn't seem to have a proper end, and I want to know what comes next! :) I'm guessing you did that deliberately? :)
Anyways, I'm off to the next one.
Fili |
 GryphonSentinal 2006-09-16 . chapter 5YE-HAW! I love this! Hats off to everyone who knows how to kill the wretched creatures! This provides god ideas to slaughter the Sue race!
(if they are even a race. They don't deserve to live in the fiction world.) Good story. |
 Writingcritter 2006-08-31 . chapter 5Insanity will rule the world. |
 Psychic-Ghost 2006-08-13 . chapter 4I laughed when I read chapter 4. This was a funny story. |
 Someone who is most definitely 2006-08-08 . chapter 5 I am reviewing you! That's not how you spell mechanical! You spell it meckanickale, because that's how you spell it. Your story sucked. I mean, I can't even begin to explain how terrible it is! I nearly threw up all over my computer! Your story is disgusting! I hate it! Stop writing! You suck! Ugh! No one loves you! Go away! Die! Lord Farquad said it right when he said, "It's rude enough being alive when no one wants you". Just die. Yeah. |
 code name kenya 2006-08-01 . chapter 1 I LOVE your story its so awesome!! rock on!
your bestest buddy
code name Kenya |
 Radarck 2006-08-01 . chapter 5 Ach, brilliant! How much do we all hate Mary-Sues?
Nice to see 3 of them get their come-uppance at last! |