This is an awesome way to start a series
please continue!

It's kind of slipping. The chapters are suggested to be longer for more enjoyment and seperate sentences would work.

Overall right now it's not the greastest but it's okay. I enjoyed reading what you had. On a final note sentences you do put together try not to put too many together or it becomes one big thing people wouldn't be interested in reading.

YAY! happy to have you writing this story again... i'm luvin it!! lol (mc.donald's quote) XP
XD keep up the good work!
And read my story!! it's a start... :( it's called... dun dun DUN! The love, the **, and the birthday XD please read (puppy eyes)PLEASE! XD

OMG! FINISH PLEASE! I'm dieng... I must know what else happens!

lolz - MENTAL! i love these kids they make me giggle =P

ITS ALL SLIPPERY! lol write more please!

yay yuu updated! Great chapter as usual =P

Lovely!

~Fop

Pleease continue! ^-^

Hm...interesting. I would explore Kong too. XD

-GCOE

Interesting. And sad how people assumed she was evil when she really wasn't...

-GCOE

UPDATE!

Can't wait for the next chapter! I have a deviant account! I'ma member of 2DxNoodle club, RaiXBB club, and I'm trying to get into RaiKim club!

Kewel it was very interesting! OMG Murdoc getting punished (this is going to be interesting!)

OMG I wanna go zombie hunting! I hope to go into it professionally. ^^ XD

-GCOE