Woah, that was awesome! I just absoloutely LOVED that fic!

This is like eating dead flies. Sorta grimy, not enjoyable, and entirely unenticing.

The grammar and everything was alright, but you need a beta.

It's overly emo. It's just like all the other emo kids who whine about their problems instead of fixing them and moving on.

Guh.

Rudolph Rhinehardt, Cliche Busters, Inc.