You interrupt the flow with Author’s notes; you shouldn’t do that as it interrupts the flow. Your grammar is a little wonky, a beta would clear that right up. Hikaru was just a tiny bit OOC, but it is to be expected: He’s just a contradictory character!

cute. XD
does that mean Hikaru himself applied the make-up on Haruhi? 8D

Yay to the best couple in Ouran High School Host Club!
This Fanfic is very cute.
Im so glad that more people are starting to like this couple!
You should make a Sequal!
You should make them kiss! ^Chu^

OMG! kawaii ~nya ^x^ please keep writing and make a sequel to this, ne? =^^=

It's very cute :)