Okay, first you brag about your story, which isn't even good, by the way, and then you just give up on it and don't update? Without even a mention that it's been discontinued? And you just leave your fans hanging. Nice job... and you brag about how great you are. You make me sick, you know?

'King Axel: Pretty good start hunh? I did ace the writing section on the WASL (Washington Assessment of Student Learning)'
Bah, nothing like a good bit of bragging to tide us all over. Psh.
And I came first in my country in English beating kids almost twice my age.
Wow.
No one cares.
And i've seen MUCH better startings.

*Cough* Ignore me.. I Like it, but the bragging wasn't needed..eh =| I'm only complaining cuz I don't like Milky Ways. o.o

Oh, Kingdom Hearts is a game originating in Japan. I highly doubt, even in an AU, that their would be any-one going by the Name "Daniel". Yeah. Japanese game=Japanese name. -Shrugs-

o.o NO DON'T LOSE YOUR SOUL!
Haha nice, this chapter was funny. Saix's scar...XD haha!
Ooh SHINY BRONZE THING! -chases after it- COME BACK! YOU'RE SHO SHINY! -trips over a tiny rock- NO

YAY! I'm finally caught up with all of the fanfics I was reading! I've been on hiatus, ya know? I put it up on Nachos and Chips, but I don't really know why I did that, considering that no one reads Nachos and Chips anyway... But, I digress. Your story is so suspenseful... I WANT THE NEXT CHAPPIE NOW! Must... eat... soul!! Lolz.

~Larxene12

YESS! A NEW CHAPTER! FINALLY!
okay... well now that the cheering and awesome soul chewing is over, here's the real review

seemed very fighting-y and not to advance the plot much... but it was well written again
your header/footers are always amusing XD
saix cracked me up (that explains the scar... nice ^__^ i'd continue with the "explaining the organization's background" thing, in addition to axel ^^, but on the side)
if only it was longer after such a delay... but it'll suffice
but congrats, nice work, and don't forget to feed your possee again soon! keep this up! i almost forgot the storyline so far

I hope you asked Sora53 if you could use her character judging by the fact that you didn't give her credit. This story was good at the beginning but it has been starting to slip. Nevertheless, I think you have some twists and turns in mind so I'll keep reading.

ha ha wow, you took the words right out of my mouth at the bottom
Nice twist with Dokken, I love it, gives a major original spin
Your writing is flowing a lot better, only suggestion I could think of is to maybe stress the drama at the end better, but I still enjoyed it a lot, keep up the good work. I'm getting really excited with the story, particularly with Dokken, I hope you keep him involved. Oh, and was Dokken hitting Saix where Saix gets his X-scar or did you just want a fight? Cause I got the scar impression, and if that was intended it had a nice subtle quality.

Just keep typing! ^_^ -Kupo3

YAY! UPDATEAGE! Anyway, no way! I would have NEVER guessed that Dokken was Sora and Corita's father! It's like, Dokken walks up to Sora in Hollow Bastion, and Sora's all, "Who are you?!" and Dokken's like "Sora... I, am your father." XD lol. Great chappie. =^.^= And just a note, if you would READ MY UPDATED CHAPTERS OF NACHOS AND CHIPS! -cough,cough- You would know that I am fangirling over someone else. Once again, great chappie. Man, this is a long review, huh? Like the energizer bunny, it just keeps going and going and going... I had suger today if you couldn't tell! Okay, I'm gonna stop now.

Ha ha ha! This chappie was hilarious! And you say you're not good at comedy. XD Anyway, hurry and update so I get to see how everyone reacts to Dokken! I updated Starlight Wish, and you REALLY need to go read that one.

Hey, Kupo3 here, used to go by Kate

chappie very funny, liked the twist at end, particular liked senseless babbling of Demyx...ha ha, stupid Demyx...chappies seem to slowly be getting longer (that's a plus for me XD) and your writing of humor has improved, so snaps for improvement, I liked very much

ohh, and I'm cool enough to be in posse on top and bottom, I mean, really, how many Sora and Riku fangirls do you meet?
not that many
~steals one of the pelted Riku plushies~
SQUEE ^_^
please try and update soon again, I know getting ideas is hard

by the way, I'm going to start writing my own fan fics...I'm not sure if I'll post them online at risk of being caught by parents...but I will at least write it on Microsoft... for a sneak preview idea (since I'm such a fan and want to let you know) its going to be about Sora + Riku + Kairi being checked into an insane asylum after returning to Destiny Islands... don't it sound fun? ^_^ please update again soon

good chapter, nice depth
job well done
liked the pulling in of demyx
your slowing some, make sure its a decent length ficcy

only criticism: YOU'VE DISSED SORA53! grr... (lol...)
she's not lazy... o_o

I agree w/ your posse, way short chappie, but very funny, your getting into the swing of things and have a talent for this

so many cliffhangers... o_O

YAY, i love your tone and style of writing, like the personalities given to organization members, your learning to slow down, chappie highly amusing

three cheers for king axel!! yay
good comedic moments ^_^ a job well done

GAH!
such a good ficcy but moving so fast
SLOW DOWN!
i want to have plenty of ficcy to read in the future
good job though, just slow it, your so far into the idea already, don't rush just to get the ideas out

seems really good so far but don't be rushed, the fic is going so fast that it'll end up only, like, 10 chappies long

take your time, this is special work your doing! ^_^