an advice, dedicate a bit more to these stories please

Still love it.

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*throws egg in your face*

your fic its so great!
I like how you writeed about the point of view of akane
about ranma and love in generall..it makes me remember things and understand (in such a form)akane`s fellings..
well..your fic it`s fantastic..!
I`ll add this to my favourites storys!
and I hope that i could see soon other story of yours...=)

Hey, that's good stuff. I liked the POV; the second-person talking makes me feel a little closed-off, an observer, which fits with her character. You showed the emotions (quite well, too) and made me do the connecting with Akane. In fact, I think this is better than fanfic -- if you cut out the word "Ranma" you could take it and, I dunno, put it in a book of short stories. Or make your own longer backstory. Or something.

Anywho. Great job. The only thing I can think of to fix is the summary, which isn't too, ah, eye-catching. And you use quote marks "artistically," thus. But that only bugs me 'cuz I'm an enormous grammar nerd. :) And even then yours at least have a point and aren't just gratuitous. I could tell stories about gratuitous quotation marks that would make your hair stand on end...

Well, I must go. I'm putting you on my author list -- write more soon!

Toodles,
Raz