aww another happy ending! loved it!

butterflys=not proper plural form of butterfly. It's "butterflies"

And I'm sure they didn't have the whole engagement thing with giving a ring{but I'm also sure they probably would've used rings, just not...like that, with the kneeling and stuff...}

Um, tons of mistakes. I suggest you use spell check in Word to fix those...

But hey, at least I'm not totally flaming you for having mistakes.
Like "OMG, you misspelled blahblahblah and blahblahblah! you totally suxxors at writing!" ...yeah, I'd never review like that unless I was having a bad day.

Anyway, you should work on having a space after a comma, because everything looks run together without one. I'm pretty sure you could fix this up into a better fic if you change a few things and edit all of your mistakes.

It's cute... but there are a bunch of grammar and spelling errors.

that was cute. I must say that there aren't many stories like this; just carefree and filled with mindless fluff. I mean there's always gotta be some huge battle and someone has to die or get injured...haha, anyways, I enjoyed this, good job!

Well isn't that cute...BUT IT'S RIGHT!

Whoa, not so bad for first time. Little spell mistake, but not bad. This story show much of emotion. You can make more with your best english and thinking, compare to this. And hope you have a better one next time. Rate of this story is 10/10

Yeah, there are a few spelling errors, but hey, I´m not the worlds greatest speller! Try to be more descriptive, and try to separate ur story into more paragraphs and stuff. But, I still liked the story. Its cute.

Okay, since it's your first time I'll go easy. It was pretty good. But I suggest more detail into evrything. Such as the descriptions of the flowers, all the variety of colors. Also some times putting things in past tense makes it a little easier for people to read. Also, have more confidence, your story was not 'crappy' it was just a little raw. With some more detail and "word-painting" as one of my teachers calls it, it could be spectacular. I'll be watching for you, so good luck!

Not as crappy as you're saying it is, seriously. It was cute! But then, I like fluffy...whatever. Just make sure you check up on your spelling, and start a new paragraph for each person talking. Look over your past and present tenses, and be a bit more detailed. Other than those things, it's good! *thumbs up*

Not bad... I like the idea, and you do a good job...what I can suggest is that there should've been more description, though you got to the point...

Start a new paragraph with each line of talking (i get on a lot of people for that...^^)

Good job...

Cute story. but yes u need practice as said before.

The best practice imo is also reading a lot of good stories.

Aww, so sweet.

It's not as crappy as you say. It was very good, in my opnion.

Okay. It's written fairly well, with nice description. But it needs a lot of work.

You need a space after punctuation marks, ie. "Hello,Link" should be "Hello, Link". "I take her hand(and blush a deep crimsom and thank the goddesses she didn't see me)and start to lead her to our location." needs a space before and after the parenthesis: "I take her hand (and blush a deep crimsom and thank the goddesses she didn't see me) and start to lead her to our location.

You need a new paragraph every time you change speaker, to make it easier and more coherent to differentiate between them.

"I said walking towards her" should be "I said, walking towards her", or, alternatively, "I said as I walked towards her".

You kept changing tenses, from present to past and back: "she asks as she sat on her bed". You need to watch that.

There are a few spelling mistakes here, for example, you spelt "Butterflies" correctly in the title, but said "butterflys" in the story.

Now, onto the main point, the plot. It's quite cute, but still fairly insubstantial. It all happens very fast with no build up or character development. And the idea that she has loved him "ever since we first met 8 years ago." seems, though it could be possible, a little strange.

As I said, the description is nice, and it's kind of cute, but it needs a lot of work. Keep writing.

Crazymark.