Poor Momo...

She should wind up meeting Nataku or something while she's off training .

Constructive Criticism: Please don't go back and forth with first-person and second-person point of view, as it just throws off the readers.

I read through the prologue believing that "I" stands for Taikoubou, and "You" stands for Momo, but as I read through the first chapter, you now make "You" for Taikoubou. The "author's note" does very little help at the bottom of the page also.

I admit though, the story is pretty mild in the Sue department compared to past fanfics I've read, so I'm not going to complain about Momo. However, if you keep up with POV switch-a-roo, it will start to sound like a major Sue-fic. \

Aw...parting is such sweet sorrow. I want to see where this separation leads to.

Haha. I like this story. It is so sweetly amusing.

good story! plz continue this...

Oh, I really love your story