This is better. Alot better, but I want more :)

This has potential! but it lacks detail you might want to ass color to the story. But it is very good. keep up the good work!

interesting. short and sweet. I like it! and the BEST PAIRING in the WORLD!lol LxZ!

Well, this little ficlet has the potential to be pretty good if you decided to expand it in the future. Zelda running from her duties is quite uncharacteristic of her, but an interesting concept nonetheless. ^^

Wow... Its good. Please update soon.

You're really good for a complete beginer.

I enjoyed this, but, you need to have a space between your comas quotation marks, etc. and the words that come after them.

Otherwise, I consider you a pro. Honestly, you're really good. And the Zelink gets you free points with me.

It's pretty god for a first timer.

Very cute, and - er - very short :P But that's okey. Like you said you're a beginner. I think you show some talent in writing. You have good descriptions and I really believed that Zelda was in love with Link in this (very) short story. You should definitely keep writing. With some practice I think you can make some really good stories.

And by the way, I love this sentence: "He pulls me to the gate by the garden."

Good luck!

Aw that was beautiful. please write more.