 Knoxy Love 2007-08-09 . chapter 1Okay let me just say this story has so much potential it leaks it into storys near it, BUT it appears you have no real plot, its bascilly not even a naruto fanfic, kyuubi is a fox, one second kyuubi's inside him, the next he gets a sword named fenrir, itachi attacks naruto loses an arm and doesnt even care, your charectors are flat and unapealing to the reader and the plot holes are like gaping chasm's, BUT like i said it has potential, all you have to do is, re write it, give more detail and depth to charecters not just hey random char #1 your now a main char, oh now after five minuetes your dead, naruto lost an arm, now kyuubi no KITSUNE is a wolf, makes no sense, this is not a flame just helping you out. |