Loved it!

the ending is so sad it made me cry! D: (sniff)

"Serena their here!"

You used the wrong form of "Their." You should have used "they're".

Easy mistake, good story though.

hi I loved this story but i'm so upset Serena had to die i would of loved to know what her queen attire was as soon as you know let me know kay on thanks danielle

Awesome story. I think some things happened a little too fast but it was still a great story. I was able to read it in one day.

This is a good story but things are moving too fast and the chapters are too short.

So Jack was a youma?

Getting interesting but too short.

Typical of Rei but considering the way things are going she should be nicer to Serena.

Too short but a good chapter.

Another great chapter but try making the chapters longer.

One thing I forgot to ask last time. Who is Jack? I thought Kenji and Ikkuo were her parents.

Loved seeing into the past.

Another awesome chapter. After this story I might check out some of your other stories.

Awesome beginning. I will probably get this read in two days.