This is a good story. But why is Lloyd mad at Genis? I find it a little strange that he would be mad at his best friend over...something. Hopefully you'll say. But I like this story - update soon, m'kay?

This story is really, really well-thought out as well as written. Can't think of anything criticism-wise, just please keep writing when you have the chance.

Make it a priority! ;)

(PS: and Thanks. Now you're making me have to go play the silly game again and I dont have my GameCube at my University Rez :P)

Wow. This is one of the longest chapters i've ever read. Good, but long.

OH MY GOD YOU FINALLY DID IT! I HAVE TO READ THIS!

Introduce Adonis RIGHT AWAY. He's so hot- even if he's short. I want to know who the father is, even though I have a small idea..