Very beautiful. I really enjoyed this story. The symbolisms were very good. ^^

This was just beautifully written. Lovely job! :)

Cute! I like it. I really like Roy and Hawkeye as a pair as well. I would suggest reading more of the manga. Most people have very little patience with it, but I really like it, and highly recommend it. Especially if you like the Roy/Hawkeye pairing. The anime kinda addresses it, but they kind of dance around it (except in the end. That scream still gives me chills...) In the manga, though, it's far more evident, that whole pairing. Anyway. Sorry to babble on. :) Your story was very cute and not overdone or anything, which I'm glad to see. Nice and light. :) Thank you for writing it!
~MindTricks

Very picturesque!
I really want to cry for those two all throughout the story - manga and anime. They try so hard and they sacrifice so much for one another, except for the one thing that they both want for themselves. They just can't cross that line for so many reasons, and yet you made it work! Great!

uh... yea... it's very nice... and kawaii! heh... i hope you right more royai! i just love ur stories!

Excellent. The symbollism, akin to The Da Vinci Code (I have read it, liked it but don't have the slightest clue what the hype was all about, despite it being a creditble novel.) All in all, a must read for all those pledging their name for RoyAi.

Ah... you know as well as I do that they don't need to literally be kicking ** to be kick-** in their own way. They rock, and I'm so glad you wrote this. It's a wonderfully descriptive piece with only two lines of dialogue. Dialogue drives my stories a lot, so I really admire that you can do something like this.
One quote I like in particular: "Stop thinking about generally bad things, Roy Mustang." It's one of those where I just go, 'Lookie here, something that makes me think five different ways at one time.' And about not calling her apartment home... yet.
I can't really say that one part or another is my favorite because this is SO fluent. My undying compliments to you and your writing!

Very nicely done. Why resist symbolism that is just screaming to be used? Good job!

The symbolic is well chosen. This is another beautiful royai oneshot!

lol love it very well done

You say you've limited experience with either manga or anime, but the characterization is very on.

Not to mention the writing is spectacular. Glad to have found you, I'll look for more of your work.

-Rantza

Wonderful. i've been scraping for Royai fics. I'm so happy I got to read this one. They're seriously perfect for each other!!

Movie? FMA movie?! (runs to YouTube)

Aw, but I loved this fic. So cute. I really liked this couple. At first, I was afraid Roy had DIED...

...But he didn't. And now he's here. I like how you've captured a more serious side of him, but still sort of kept his regular humor there. You described them perfectly, especially Hawkeye. And the Eve thing was a good metaphor or whatever you call it, because the actual show did have that kind of thing in the background...
They-should-get-MARRIED! lol.

I’m so happy you’ve written FMA fanfiction, (specifically Royai of course) and I can’t believe I didn’t notice sooner. I loved the entire thing. The apples. The rain. All the symbolism was good. And Black Hayate made an appearance. I love him. I liked the idea of him taking a picture of Riza being domestic, and then her ordering him to incinerate it. You must write more FMA. I don’t care if it’s Royai or not. I wish I could articulate how great it was in better words, but I hope I loved it will suffice.

...You did them poetic justice. Excellent. I'm not half as good and I write original fiction.

*claps*