Fascinating.

Excellent shot, well written, and words with more than two syllables. Amazing in this particular section. Well done!

I was looking for some pretty A/H inspiration in which everyone dies to compensate for the peice of unrealistic A/H trosh I'm writing, and then they didn't all die. I'm very disappointed.

Obligatory, petty moment of concrit: "She was just drifting along like a beachcomber on a barren beach, trying to collect precious memories but finding nothing, really, nothing at all besides twisted wood and wearied stones." The repetition of 'beach' was ineffective and jarring, but barren shore would have worked. *tickboxes so this review is constructive*

I love the metaphors. I love how you use your language to create the emotional and psychological settings, more than the physical (but that doesn't get neglected either). I need your tutelage. Please, pretty please. I shall make sure to leave an apple on your desk every morning, I promise.

In short, this was lovely. You put so much tight, tormented emotion/humanity in whatever you write. It can seem contrived, or just *problematic* for someone who doesn't know who Uther and Ingraine are, but I still love the way you do it all.

Pretty fics make me happy. Pretty fics written by wonderful friends, even more so.

~ Yeti

Heya.

Brilliant.

I don't think I'm giving any secrets away to say that I started off adoring your work, then went through a meh patcg, but this... this wonderful! I understood it and everything.

You managed to me eloquent *and* comprehensible. I adored they style, the flow, the language... and yet, it still had a punch.

Good work.

Mozzie.

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eep :)
ah, very nice. I have no concrit; it's been a long coupla days :D

So beautifyly erotic..I liked it :)

heh, nice. As ever, I have nothing remotely constructive to say about it...

That was absolutely beautiful. You managed to write something 'erotic' without giving any naughty details. *claps and sighs*