It didn't suck. It was very good for a first attempt. Just keep writing, you'll get better.

You do not suck I liked it.

well i loved it it rocks!

started out okay, towards the end, you might want to work on changes some of the words around so that you keep the same rhythmic pattern k? Leah (IncurableOutcast)

I liked it.

Very nice, I think it's rather interesting (in a good way). Bravo.

You're right, it's not spectacular. I could tell you wrote it instead of just allowing it to become written. Next time, if you can't find the words, don't force them. Or maybe I just hate the idea of H/R.

Good poem - don't be so negative about it! :-)

It was good, until "scent."

No, it didn't suck at all! It was much better than any poetry I could have done- that is so not my area! I agree with you up till scent is my favorite, but that's probably because I didn't understand it as well- so it's me, not you! I like the idea behind it to- very touching.

um yeah that did kinda suck. No offense! you're a great writer! just... uh... um... well, it's different. your spelling is sorta bad, too, but... da*n it, i'm TRYING to be constructive. oh well. bye! (_)

that was good!

Bravo!

One word- GREAT!

I really liked it! It really was very good!