This is an incredible story so far! I've bookmarked it to keep reading.

I'm never fond of timelines getting messed up, but I've mellowed enough that I can appreciate and become curious as to what'll happen next in this story. So I'm rather fond of it :).

Only critique note is that at one point (the first time you mention Motoki by last name) you say Furata instead of Furuhata. But you seem to have caught yourself subsequently.

Ismail

very good. keep going...maybe u can hav demando come down to teh past as well...that'd bee kul...and try to get allt he other scouts inas ell...keep ging luv it! its really good!plz continue

mmm... yes, I know... old story and everything but... did you ever intend for this one to be finished? Because i really intended it to... K&S Leni.

Delightful. Your characterization of Esmeraude is beautiful as is your take on Saffir. The two of them really do have some splendid interaction going on between them. I'm also enjoying reading more of Esmeraude's plan though I don't completely understand it myself just yet. Still, her scenes with Mamoru are very enjoyable, and I'm looking forward to seeing more interaction between them in the future. Great job. Please keep up the good work.

OOOOOO! OOOOOOOOO! The plot thickens! It's cool how you threw in Motoki's intuition in there (he's such a good hearted person) and -eeks!- kinda scary that Esmeraude and Saffir are hearing of the senshi so early. Hm. And is Esmeraude changing?...I guess us readers will have to find out in your next update! So keep up the excellent work (I am SOOOOO glad you've started to work on a SM story again!) and Good Job!

Please write more! I was reading this on your old website Quicksilver's labyrinth and thought this and your other SM were brilliant! Especially Virgo. So please update more!

A very, very interesting and original idea, and you seem to have it quite well developed. Hope to see more soon!

Wow...about time you updated! Great story so far. Update soon.

This is original and something different.!

I'd really like to see where this is going... More, please!

Please make there be Saffir/Esmeraude! For some reason I have become obsessed with this total NON-couple. It's a great fic, with a really interesting premise. PLEASE CONTINUE!

AHHHH!1 PLEEEEEEEEEEAASEE! FINISH! all of your stuff I have read so far is amazing (though ive only read three... or two... or something) and this story just backs up that fact. Please write more so I can lose myself in yet another alternate reality!

An extremely intriguing villian premise for a fic. The plot is refreshingly original, and I look forward to the interactions between Esmeraude, Saffir, Mamoru and Usagi. More, I say, more! -

i really like this different approach to sm ff *is this going to be um/se? what are your intentions? LOL* are you going to have usagi in this story? i think it would be nice, to have saffir to have some sort of relationship with usagi, as 'ezzy' gets it going on with mamoru . . . but i don't know what you are planning for this story, so you most definitely have to hurry with the upcoming chapters so the rest of your audience can find out! :)

i like it...

please continue...