this is SO awesome!! update it!! PLEASE!?!?!?

Great story, I love it! You didnt' update for a year! Pls Update soon!! Please don't abandon this story, it isn't finish yet!

Hey, how come you've never updated this?
It was going s well...

Ooh tell me more! I love the thing were Toman is telling Adria about Vala and then it goes back to Vala. Please update!

Oh! Great story. I love it so far. I can't wait to see what happens with Vala. And Qetesh. I can't believe that evil snake is back. And Vala's pregnant!1 Ah! i can't, can't, can't wait to see what happens. Please update son!

Gotta totally diagree, this felt like the best chapter so far - at least as far as the flow and scan goes. Still a tiny bit stilted at points, but better. Particularly the dialogue - the Qetesh/Vala dialogue in particular was priceless. My advice would still be to relax a little more, but it definitely feels smoother than the other chapters :)

Really enjoying this, I'll be watching for an update!

kay x (kalesbohan over at LJ)

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*shock*

nice twist. *must read next chapter*

And Daniel carrying around a ring! Like Vaughn! Too cute.

loved the structure in this one, very nicely done.

it's a really interesting idea, that Vala could have been 'alive' for decades - one I've never really thought of before.

You're not 'blown out of the water,' lol, you're just AU :)

Few little things in this chapter like 'alter' (altar) and 'women' several times when I think you meant 'woman'.

The writing is good, it just doesn't feel relaxed some of the time. There's a bit of a disjunction between the dialogue and the prose, mostly because the prose is much more formal and feels a little stilted whereas the dialogue is exactly right and dead on (so that is a compliment, lol).

kay x

Now this is real cruel. Vala is pregant and still has a Go'uld in her and I'm left hanging.

Have you continued this? Please, pretty please. With sugar on top?

Yay Daniel/Vala and Sam/Jack! With babies on the way!!:)

But oh no Qetesh still in Vala's mind. So not good. I mean poor Daniel he already went through something similar with Sha're. I hope this time turns out better.

And there is room for some amusement when bickering with another conciousness that is sharing your body. Although I'm not to sure about Qetesh's taste in men.

I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes. Keep up the good work.

good chapter, i love your writing keep it up, I'll be waiting :)

Oh yay! I liked the chapter (especcially the beginning) and don't worry about it being "weak" as you put it. It's a filler and those are nessacary every once and a while. It's also good to take a breather from the action. ;p
-Briar

I think it was a good transition chapter. The scene between Jack and Daniel was really good, and we also got to hear about the lattest trick by the NID and get some insight into Daniel's thoughts. Looking forward to reading more.

Oh dear.. how are they going to get out of this one? I can't believe the Tok'ra wouldn't remove all of Qetesh. Jerks.. unless they didn't know how. Maybe they can put her to sleep again. Because Vala being a Go'auld again would not be a good thing. Thanks for the update!